I strongly agree to the argument that people’s behavior is in almost all entirety depends on outer forces. These forces largely originate from our social, economic, moral etc. backgrounds. There might also be scanty scope of our behavior depending on our internal forces like conscience or inner voice.
The argument clearly assumes that humans identified as social animals derive all thoughts from society. Whatever happening around them play a vital role in the fabrication of any kind of thinking. As our behavior bears close relation to the thinking developed in mind, there is little room to contrast this argument completely. We can take an example of a child. At home, if a child witnesses domestic violence against his mother, certainly he would develop a mindset either in the positive way or the negative way. After seeing a plethora of this, he is certain to develop a kind of mindset related to violence. He would either indulge in violence or might go to oppose it. But surely his behavior will depend on the factor(s) that were surely not his own creation.
The behavior of humans can depend on many contributing factors like social, economic, moral, atheistic etc. The formation of our behavior largely depends on these. The example in the above paragraph shows how our behavior depends on social factor. Likewise it depends on economic and moral factors also. A person born in limited resources like the daughter of a cab driver. The entire childhood she must have compromised or had to forsake her aspirations for something else. She would have wanted to wear fancy clothes, have costly toys etc. So when she grows up, she would certainly have a mindset of becoming someone which brings a good source of income. For this she would show propensity toward hard work or easy money through vice. She might also think that money is not the end i.e. her inner forces compel her to think otherwise but she needs to satisfy her worldly pleasures. The economic factors which molded her entire life were not in her hands. Likeways a child born in lavish family had all the means he wanted to enjoy life. He might think that hard work brings nothing. There is no need to do hard work. His behavior might have an important ingredient of being lax all the time. He is not alert or conscious toward his life or career matters.
The examples aptly concludes that people’s behavior always have a major contributory factors outside his/ her control. There might be very little control over their behavior by inner forces. The socio-economic factors will always have a significant bearing on the behavior and thinking of human beings. We grow in society and all the positives and negatives of society are inside us varying in only degrees.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 249, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Likewise,
... our behavior depends on social factor. Likewise it depends on economic and moral factor...
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Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...t depends on economic and moral factors also. A person born in limited resources lik...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, likewise, so, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2292.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 466.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91845493562 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52549125162 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525751072961 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.682573185 60.3974514979 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.935483871 118.986275619 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0322580645 23.4991977007 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.16129032258 5.21951772744 22% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10388068953 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0278695238396 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0260822142034 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0737340829195 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189954435948 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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