People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Human behavior is highly subjective to their characteristics and the environment where it exists. So, the action one takes or the way one behaves depends on a number of factors. The author contends that the behavior of humans depends on external factors which might be under their own control. I mostly agree with the statement for the following reasons.
To begin with, humans, being a social animal, feel secure and at ease in their group, be it their family or their friend circle. In order to fit in, the person might have to conform to the behavior of their friends or their peers, which will certainly have an effect in their actions. For example, Teenagers, in their rebellious phase, might be highly affected by their circle and hence, take actions against their own beliefs to seem to be cool with their friends. It is prominent that adolescents prefer the company of their friends over their family and prioritize the beliefs of their circle over themselves. This will certainly overshadow their judgement. So, the people around us will have a lot of effects on our behavior.
Moreover, the actions and decisions of a person will also be affected by the environment he or she lives in. People living in urban areas will make different choices to complement their lifestyle whereas people in the countryside might have different thoughts. For example, People in a poor family have a limited number of choices or actions as compared to an affluent group. The poor person might want to do a number of things like starting a business, visiting different countries but might have to resist their temptations due to a lack of economic support. However, If he were to be rich and famous, he might have to think twice before walking around the city to prevent their fans gathering around or paparazzi taking pictures. Hence, the environment of the person has certainly affected their behavior.
However, it is not to say that humans are incapable of independent thinking and thus, have to be dependent on external factors. People often make choices against their situation or close circles. For example, if there were no independent thinkers there would not be much innovation in the world. Galileo contended that the sun was the center of the universe and the earth revolved around it, in a time when everyone was convinced that earth was the center of the universe. If he didn’t research independently, he would have conformed with the religious group causing a great blow to scientific development. Hence, it might not be true to assert that the behavior of a person is not under his own control.
In conclusion, the behavior of a person is subjective to a number of reasons including their family and friend circles, their environment in which they grew and even their own experiences. However, people might, sometimes, resist conformity and show independence in behavior regardless of the above factors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 666, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...rtainly overshadow their judgement. So, the people around us will have a lot of effects on our behav...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, thus, whereas, for example, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2438.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 489.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98568507157 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6859179393 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460122699387 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 743.4 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3883831997 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.583333333 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.20833333333 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193858027997 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664029151325 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455689329731 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128602338016 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359200530693 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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