People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Almost everything in this universe is changing, there are very few things that remain ever constant. People's behavior is not an exception- I believe. The author claims that it is, by large, shaped by various factors we encounter in our course of life rather than our own choice. Well, I agree with him in this point to a great extent, nevertheless, the fact is not entirely true. Specifically, in some stages of our life, we do modify our behavior as we feel it to be.
Firstly, I believe that age is a very important factor in the context of moulding our action and vision. In an early age, children use to learn everything from what is happening in their surrounding, and thus external factors have a huge impact on developing their behavior. Take, for instance, a child, who is brought up in a joint family, learns to cooperate with others subconsciously. He grows up as a playful child in compare to his other friend, may be, who is not fortunate enough to have a good family. In a broken family where there is a lack of harmony among its members- a child rarely learns the good traits of behavior as he rarely gets exposed to it.
Similarly, in school, students are influenced by their teachers and peers. They try to follow what their seniors are doing or advising them to do as they take it as a qualified norm. Sometimes they get rewarded for doing something great and that motivates him or her to do that again. On the contrary, a punishment keeps one restrained from doing something offensive- and this is how factors like encouragement or punishment play a great role in shaping their behavior, not they themselves are determining it.
However, this is not the case all through our life. When we get matured enough, we start to make decisions on our own whether or not to act in a certain way that may be different from what we have learnt insofar. For example, we all have learned to speak the truth always. But sometimes, situations demand a statement to be modified in a nuanced way and when are living that moment, we re-learn that there are exceptions to our learning.
In essence, I agree with the statement as long as it is not taken to the extreme. Forces do modify our behavior to a large extent but at some point in our life, it is us who actively modify our behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...n and vision. In an early age, children use to learn everything from what is happen...
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Line 7, column 119, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
..., we start to make decisions on our own whether or not to act in a certain way that may be dif...
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Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
... we all have learned to speak the truth always. But sometimes, situations demand a sta...
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Line 7, column 334, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a nuanced way" with adverb for "nuanced"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...tions demand a statement to be modified in a nuanced way and when are living that moment, we re-...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, similarly, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, on the contrary, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 414.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57487922705 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64086445911 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526570048309 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9954648771 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05 5.21951772744 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112668104827 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0381834015135 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0325944812387 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0688396190928 0.150359130593 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321244562201 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.8420337079 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.