"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Some people believe that the most important trait of a successful leader is the sense of competitiveness. After all, it drives us to excel in our tasks and gives a continuous motivation to achieve higher shots. Be that as it may, I presume that, the mindset to work together to attain a common goal is much more important than the other one. Be it in the industry or in a governmental position, a leader must possess the quality to assemble everyone's effort to make a sustainable solution. Moreover, without the sense of cooperation, no bigger achievements can be achieved. So, it is important for the society to understand the value of instilling the right sense in their young generation.
First of all, a leader requires to incorporate everyone's effort while pulling off a big task. For example, in industry, for promoting a new product in the market - a company has to work coherently with all of its department, namely design, manufacture, sales and marketing. If one of them wants to hold its stand by competing with the others, it may often make them to stick to their own opinion even if it is wrong and eventually lead them failing to reach to the ultimate goal. When the teams are inter-dependent, the sense of competition stops one to help the other to get rid of a problem. Here, a visionary leader will n ever be un-cooperative as it is a hindrance for the overall system to work efficiently. Rather, he will create an environment, motivate the workers and resolute their conflicts so that they can all work together with the attitude that corresponds to the shared goal.
Secondly, in a bigger scene, for instance, a ruler directing a nation has to be inclusive. In a political arena, different parties have different philosophies and come with different solution to a problem. A leader has to be respectful to all of them and decide the best one without affecting the harmony. But, in this case, a leader who is egoistic, wants to be always in the winning position- can we expect him to chalk out the best decision in the best possible manner? Certainly not. Without having the mentality to respect others opinion, a leader will lead to an autocrat, which in turn, will lead to violence.
Some may argue that the lack of competitiveness hampers the flow of our work and reduces our urge to excel ourselves. But it is, infact, the whole opposite thing. When we want to get in the fast moving position, we run after it by hook or by crook and often discover us back to the square one due to the lack of coordination. Sometimes, a particular task has to be done in a particular order and any deviance from that results in a disaster. Had it been the case, our motivation would have been further deteriorated.
In essence, I believe that not a sense of competition, but that of co-operation makes one a good leader. As the latter allows us to integrate our efforts while the former, sort of, disrupts that to some extent. Also, a leader- a governor, needs to govern a body incorporating every other person, which is impossible to attain in the absence of the motive of working together.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 33, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'incorporating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: incorporating
...ion. First of all, a leader requires to incorporate everyones effort while pulling off a bi...
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Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...urn, will lead to violence. Some may argue that the lack of competitiveness hamper...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, after all, as to, for example, for instance, sort of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 58.6224719101 154% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2565.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 546.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6978021978 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89088137734 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512820512821 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 828.9 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2963026842 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.6 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.84 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.56 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137182046773 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352604174678 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390027061304 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0739927758493 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390662952294 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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