A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
It is essential that a country holds up its reputation in implementing its law against criminal. And this implementation includes punishment as a consequence for the crime the individual has carried out. Now, most nations have a legal framework by which they judge the crime committed, and also decide what manner of punishment the criminal should be imposed on. The prompt suggests a different idea, for the consequence part, where the criminal should not retain the civil rights or the the right to benefit from his or her labour. I'd like to take a stand against the prompt, and in doing so, would like to mention two reasons as to why I support this stand against the prompt.
Firstly, the object in question are but two - one, the civil right, and the second, the right to benefit from the labour. These are the two major rights which a nation is responsible for providing its citizens. Or, rephrasing this, it is the two fundamental rights which makes a human a citizen of a particular nation under interest. Strip away the civil rights, and one can see the same consequences that one sees in a third-world country having no law and order. Strip away the right to benefit from his or her labour, the idea in itself, though not fully manifested, gives an essence of the slavery system that used to be prevalent few centuries back. The consequence put forward by the prompt, in its core, questions the citizenship of a crime doer. So, rephrasing the question would be like - if any crime is committed, should the criminal be reatained his right as a citizen of the country. This is a deeply disturbing questions, from the legalistic point of view. To further strenghten my point, I'd like to put forth a similar analogy, which can be drawn from a father-son relationship. Does doing anything (however worst imaginable) by the son disqualify him of his sonship by his father? I guess the answer is self-evident.
The second point I'd like to put forth is from the "means of living" perspective. The question is, will enacting such an idea has a disastorous effect on the lifes of those around him or her? Isn't the family of a man dependent on the head of the house. If we deny his right to earn or benefit from the labour he does, we are indirectly denying his means to earn, which in turn denies the mode by which he provides for his family needs. Thus in implementing such an idea practically, it will only lead to much more brokeness in the society, and if pondered more deeply, would cause further crimes to be committed in the name for survival.
Thus, I'd like to conclude, that, the denial if the civil rights and the rights for benefitting from labour would carry with itself disastorous consequences, such as which we might not be able to imagine, as we haven't seen it around us. The most accepted, by default punishment for the crimes in various societies are implemented by a term in prison, or other probation centres, so that the man commiting the crime can realize of his mistake, and might find repentance by bearing the consequence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, so, third, thus, as to, i guess, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2526.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 537.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70391061453 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72425337389 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48417132216 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7063006516 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.826086957 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.347826087 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82608695652 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253520712002 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721173121204 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678138596201 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163993442053 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350322212239 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.