A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor.
The claim raises a controversial statement on whether or not a person who has broken the social contract should retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labour. The crime rate is at its peaks right now in most parts of the world. Indisputably committing a crime is a bad thing. There might be numerous reasons why a person commits a crime. The person committing a crime has to be punished and steps should be taken to transform him or her into a better person. Nevertheless, committing a crime shouldn't take away one's civil rights or any labour benefits from the person. Thus, I generally disagree with the claim and argue that the person must be treated by corrective punishment and make him or her a better person.
First of all, the person committing a crime may have several reasons for it. It may be because of the impecuniousness, family environment, neighbourhood the person grew up in. Whatever the reason may be, It is not condonable to commit a crime. However, taking away the rights away from the person will not do any good for the person who committed the crime or the victim. Instead, the person has to undergo a punishment and make him understand the extent of his crime and how it has affected the victim. In India, there was a study conducted by the students at the University of Vellore in which the students researched the recidivism rates among many inmates in Vellore prison. It was found that the inmates who had met the victim and understood the ramifications of his or her actions had fewer recidivism rates compared to the other inmates. All I am trying to say here is there are many other ways in which a person can be made better than taking away the civil rights.
Moreover, civil rights is a person's right. It can not be taken away based on the fact that, the person committed a crime. Taking away the rights might have a negative impact on the person. It may also lead to recidivism simply because of the fact that he or she can not benefit from his or her own labour. It can also cause the person to resent the society even more, which can lead to the person committing even more crimes.
Admittedly, One might argue that, a person who commits a crime knowingly is a bad person and that nothing good should ever happen to him. These arguments are similar to " tit for tat " analogy. This kind of arguments does not help the victim in any way. Additionally, some might argue that having the rights to the person cut off will make the victim feel better. But that might be only in the short run. We need to have a positive reinforcement strategy to transform criminals into good human beings.
While committing a crime is a cardinal sin, it doesn't have to take away a person's rights. There are many ways to transform a person into a good social person. Taking away the rights only makes matters worse.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...aim raises a controversial statement on whether or not a person who has broken the social cont...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...erson. Nevertheless, committing a crime shouldnt take away ones civil rights or any labo...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...il rights. Moreover, civil rights is a persons right. It can not be taken away based o...
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Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
.... It may also lead to recidivism simply because of the fact that he or she can not benefit from his or h...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ommitting a crime is a cardinal sin, it doesnt have to take away a persons rights. The...
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Line 9, column 209, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ay the rights only makes matters worse.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, thus, while, as to, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2361.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 519.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54913294798 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50378369084 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420038535645 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 746.1 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0729121446 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.4137931034 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8965517241 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.62068965517 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 23.0 5.13820224719 448% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450162506389 0.243740707755 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131959649281 0.0831039109588 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131439056102 0.0758088955206 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270929928931 0.150359130593 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137278600026 0.0667264976115 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 12.1639044944 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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