To prepare young people to be leaders in government, industry or any other field is to instill a sense of both competition and cooperation.
The future of any society is determined by its younger generation. The education opportunities that the younger generation is presented with, the principles and ethics that the children are made to learn are important. This is important because it is these children that will grow up to be politicians and workers in the society and will decide the level at with society prosper. Therefore, education of children are very important.
While educating young people, it becomes important to decide whether the curriculum should develop a inner sense of competition or not. If there is competition between children, then everyone will strive to become the best, so that they can beat others. This is applicable in sports and in education and in all other fields. Every person has a need for praise. If competition is promoted, then to gain praises, children would work hard and try to improve at a faster pace. Hence, due to competition, young people would learn faster. In schools, it is this sense of competition which forces a student to study harder and to get good grades in each subject. Although, learning at a faster pace is a good thing, if children become too competitive, then they would try to take a wrong path to get ahead of others. If any children hurt another child deliberately just to get ahead, then this sense of extreme competition is bad and is not a deseriable teaching that any child should get.
To prevent children from getting too competitive, they also need to learn the sense of cooperation. It is only when children learn cooperation, they will help one another. Through working in team only, something great can be achieved. So, when children learn cooperation, they would compliment other children in the group, learning from one another and turning their weaknesses into strengths. This cooperation is very important as it allows for a large scale project to be undertaken with relative ease. For example, government any nation work in cooperation to create laws. If any single individual is assigned the task of creating laws for any nation, then no matter how intelligent the individual is, the laws would have some loophole and would be weak. Similiarly, in any scientific research group, it is multiple scientist working together towards a common goal. An individual scientist will not achieve what a team of scientist will.
Therefore, a sense of competition is needed so that individual is inspired enought to learn new things so that he/she may not remain behind anyone. But extreme sense of competitive feeling is bad, and may lead to a feeling of ill-will towards other individual. Along with some sense of competition, sense of cooperation is needed in an individual so that he/she can work with others in group helping one another. Hence, best way to prepare young people to be leaders in government, industry or any other field is to instill a sense of both competition and cooperation. But, it should be made sure, that neither of them is at its extreme.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e whether the curriculum should develop a inner sense of competition or not. If t...
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Line 7, column 419, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ', the best'.
Suggestion: , the best
...hers in group helping one another. Hence, best way to prepare young people to be leade...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2503.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 504.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96626984127 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79147346496 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470238095238 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 777.6 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7549517364 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7037037037 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7037037037 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295245193291 0.243740707755 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806258463892 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154095498426 0.0758088955206 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180588817919 0.150359130593 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149176688525 0.0667264976115 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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