The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Steve Jobs once said that imagine the augmentation in efficacy of a man who has a bicycle than the one who does not. Adding to this point he elaborated that if a bicycle can hugely optimize the performance, then imagine how much a computer would aid to increment this efficiency. This efficacy that he dreamed of in now commonplace, from offices to schools to shopping centers, technology is ubiquitous. Several reasons can be provided to support the statement that technology aids to people's efficiency and consequently they end up having more leisure time.
To being with, in field of education technology has made a huge impact on changing the old ways of learning. Lectures are not confined to classrooms anymore. Any student can take any class literally from anywhere in the world, such is the ubiquity of internet. And this has saved students and teacher both an ample amount of time, which otherwise would have been wasted in travelling to the premises for meetings as small as a doubt clearing session. Moreover, in the field of research, technology has expedite the process of extracting data from archives, by providing fast and precise search engines. The time which was consumed in looking for valuable leads in books and articles manually, only in a library, is now being utilized in achieving the goal.
Moreover, in business and jobs, office professionals seamlessly exploit technology to enhance a day's productivity and improve efficiency. From an Instant Message communication, to scanning documents and e-mailing them, to a Skype call with a client overseas, almost every task is super-charged by technology. They save ample amount of time performing excellently with these multitasking machines so that they could leave office on time. In addition, Offices these days are an evidence in supporting the argument, now-a-days from video games to football matches and gym as well as yoga room are incorporated in offices. If it was not for technology, no office would have ever incorporated such facilities that help an employee enjoy their leisure time.
Additionally in support of the statement on more evidence can be established, it the amazon's latest technology based shopping center where you can simply walk in take the items you need and walk out, without the frustration of waiting in a line to bill the products you want to purchase. The point here is that, there is a whole new level to which technology is helping us save time, only so we could utilize the way we want.
However, people may argue that having more and more leisure time will one day leave all of us unemployed and all the work which human used to do will be accomplished by marvels of technology like artificially intelligent robots and production lines and drones. But, we shall not forget that same allegations are being made from past century and yet the only purpose of technology is to serve the mankind.
Conclusively, technology has largely aimed at saving time for humans to get more involved in recreational activities and shall continue to do so dauntlessly irrespective of what the critiques aver.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 486, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...t the statement that technology aids to peoples efficiency and consequently they end up...
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Line 3, column 4, Rule ID: BEING_BEGIN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'begin'?
Suggestion: begin
... end up having more leisure time. To being with, in field of education technology ...
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Line 3, column 503, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'expedited'.
Suggestion: expedited
...n the field of research, technology has expedite the process of extracting data from arc...
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Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
...mlessly exploit technology to enhance a days productivity and improve efficiency. Fr...
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Line 5, column 369, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this multitasking' or 'these multitaskings'?
Suggestion: this multitasking; these multitaskings
...unt of time performing excellently with these multitasking machines so that they could leave offic...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...n employee enjoy their leisure time. Additionally in support of the statement on more evi...
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Line 7, column 86, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'amazons the latest'.
Suggestion: amazons the latest
...ore evidence can be established, it the amazons latest technology based shopping center where ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, well, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2602.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 515.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05242718447 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87976025646 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 215.323595506 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555339805825 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 842.4 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6868213377 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.1 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270936895527 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716134900598 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704861835458 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131907729148 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301021858587 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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