The prompt suggests that people should prepare its young generation for leadership roles by instilling in them a sense of coorperation and not competition. I mostly disagree with the statement because of it's all or nothing approach and the way mordern society has been structured.
The prompt suggests that people should prepare its young generation for leadership roles by instilling in them a sense of coorperation and not competition. I mostly disagree with the statement because of it's all or nothing approach and the way mordern society has been structured.
Firstly, people cooperate in industry with the ultimate goal of winning some competition or getting the title of being the best at what they do. For instance, in the corporate world, companies are competing with each other in order to make profits and capture market share. The leaders and employess within the company cooperate to get work done the best possible way so that their company is winning from its competing companies. These employees will get pay hikes and bonuses if their company wins the competition in it's particular segement, in the end it's the win of the company that matters and it's what allows the company to survive in this ruthless world. Another example would be Formula one, in which the drivers must cooperate with each other for optimal development of the car throughout the season, but at the same time to be remembered for the generations to come it's the championships that matter for which they must compete with each other to get crowned the champion of the sport. In mordern society, it's the results that matter as shown by the above examples, people must cooperate with the ultimate goal of winning the competition in mind, if they seek to be impactfull and successfull in society.
Secondly, in mordern politics it is impossible to survive without having a competitive spirt and competitive spirit brings out the best in a person. For instance, in indian politics the congress and the BJP party have to compete at everything to prove their worth to the people of the country, many times this sense competition leads to leaders of opposite parties slandering each other. While on the surface this may seem like a negative aspect, on closer inspection it's a way of keeping the party in power in check, instead of coorperating with the party in power, the opposition points out their mistakes and keeps the ruling party on their toes. this pushes the ruling party to be vigilant in jobs because they are at the risk of losing power at any time, this helps the efficient functioning of the largest democracy in the world. The above examples proves how it is important to be competitive in mordern world and how it helps in reducing complacency and improving performance.
In conclusion, it important for the society to prepare it's young children by instilling in them a sense of cooperation. However, in the mordern world for any person to thrive, he has to be able to compete with others to bring out the best among them
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... in its particular segement, in the end its the win of the company that matters and...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... remembered for the generations to come its the championships that matter for which...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...mpion of the sport. In mordern society, its the results that matter as shown by the...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...a negative aspect, on closer inspection its a way of keeping the party in power in...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...spect, on closer inspection its a way of keeping the party in power in check, ins...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...d keeps the ruling party on their toes. this pushes the ruling party to be vigilant ...
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Message: You should probably use 'prove'.
Suggestion: prove
...ocracy in the world. The above examples proves how it is important to be competitive i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 89.0 58.6224719101 152% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2275.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86111111111 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66198756016 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472222222222 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0853467069 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.666666667 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2 23.4991977007 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 5.21951772744 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349258000173 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138342052829 0.0831039109588 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152829696861 0.0758088955206 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.31993564843 0.150359130593 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.284321267497 0.0667264976115 426% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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