“Schools should be responsible not only for teaching academic skills but also for teaching ethical and social values.
Needless to say, one of the most important places in all societies, because of its impacts on all aspects of children's personal and social lives, is schools. Therefore, all parents have always been trying to choose best schools for their children in order to guarantee their future. In this regard, some people believe that in the schools, children have to be thought about ethical and social values moreover to academic skills. I disagree with this view and I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Schools have to spend all their time to teach academic skills, because in modern time subjects are so hard and deep. Some sociologists believe that because of huge development that has happened in sciences in modern time there are a lot of things which children have to learn in order to be expertise in one area. Hence they have posed that schools have to spend all their times to teach academic skills in order to prepare their student to find suitable job in the future and they must not waste their time to teach other things like ethical and social values. You can take my life and my father's life as the best example for this case. He told me when he was student, he just studies two or three books during one year and he had a lot of free time when he was in school, but when I was student I had to study around 12 or 13 books during one year plus other books which were necessary to understand topics that I needed to learn, therefore, I did not have free time to spend for other things. Thus, in modern time students do not have time to learn ethical and social value when they are in schools.
In modern time we do not have one social and ethical values among people in one society. this topic has been discussed by many sociologies that the majority of them believe that in modern time because of free movement of capital and labours in all economics we have multination societies and every nation has specific social and ethical values that we have to respect them. Therefore, they believe that because these nations' children usually go to one school together schools cannot teach them one social and ethical values, because if schools do it, this program will generate conflicts among students and even among society that are worse for development in society. By way of illustration, I can refer to some statistics which have been published by several international organizations. Based on these statistics all societies that do not teach social and ethical values are more development than other societies that teach their students about ethical and social values. Thus, in order to have development society, we should not perform ethical and social programs in our schools.
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some people believe that schools have to teach ethical and social values. In contrast, I argued that this opinion is not correct for a couple of reasons. First, schools have to spend all their times to teach academic skills, because they are so hard in modern time, second in modern time there is no equal social and ethical values in one societies that schools can teach them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: one society; a society; societies
...s no equal social and ethical values in one societies that schools can teach them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, in brief, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 33.0505617978 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2600.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 548.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74452554745 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38194193268 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.392335766423 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 808.2 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.0486001961 60.3974514979 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.842105263 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8421052632 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258457876442 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991494787245 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758599354638 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1960107804 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670792090854 0.0667264976115 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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