do you agree or disagree with the following statement? the opinion of celebrities, such as entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Needless to say, one of the most important groups in every society, because of their impacts on all aspects of individuals lives, is celebrities. Therefore, all people have always been affecting by these individuals throw the history. In this regard some people believe that celebrities such as entertainers and athletes have more impact on younger individuals than older people. I agree with this view and I will discuss my reasons to support this view in the following paragraphs.
Some people believe that older people always like to be update individuals, so they have been affected more than young people by celebrities' speeches. Such people wrongly believe that because human societies are dynamic, lifestyles have always been changing and new lifestyles usually are more attractive. Hence, older people always like to fallow these lifestyles that the celebrities usually are represent of new lifestyles, therefore the celebrities' speeches like entertainers and athletes affect older people more than young people. However, I disagree with this opinion, because older people usually are so busy because of their jobs, therefore they do not have enough time to watch or listen to celebrities' speeches, hence celebrities' speeches always have more impact on younger people which I will discuss in the next paragraphs. You can take my father as the best example for this case. He goes to his work place form early morning till late evening and when he come back to home, he just has time to eat his dinner after than he has to go to bed and he does not have time to watch or listen to entertainers or athletes' speeches. Thus, celebrities cannot affect older people, because older people are so busy.
Celebrities have huge impact on young people, because young people usually are affected by their circumstance. This topic has been discussed by several psychologists that the majority of them believe that celebrities especially entertainers and athletes always are guide for young people. These psychologists believe that young people usually try to form their thinking and worldview, hence they usually spend most of their time to watch and listen to other people's speeches especially celebrities. Therefore, these psychologists have posed that celebrities can affect young people very easy, since they do not have stable thinking about the world. I agree with this view, because celebrities usually bring new thinking to every societies and new generation usually are different from previous generation and it is sign of impact of celebrities especially entertainers and athletes on young people. By way of illustration, I can refer to some statistics which have been published by several international organizations. Based on these statistics approximately all companies that produce goods for young people use celebrities especially athletes to advertise their products. Thus, celebrities have more impact on young people, because young people are forming their worldview.
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some individuals believe that celebrities usually have more impact on young people than older people. I argued that this view is correct for a couple of reasons. First, older people are so busy, hence they do not have time to watch or listen to celebrities' speeches, second, young people usually are forming their worldview and celebrities usually have new speeches for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put between 'are' and 'represent'.
Suggestion: are usually represent
...w these lifestyles that the celebrities usually are represent of new lifestyles, therefore the celebr...
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Line 2, column 398, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'represented'.
Suggestion: represented
...styles that the celebrities usually are represent of new lifestyles, therefore the celebr...
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Line 5, column 430, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ies usually have new speeches for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, as to, in brief, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2875.0 1977.66487455 145% => OK
No of words: 540.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32407407407 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79859544921 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.364814814815 0.524837075471 70% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 911.7 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1904016406 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.681818182 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5454545455 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63636363636 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246220155976 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922844739822 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617551222916 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178604579359 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551058426794 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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