To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Needless to say, one of the most important things which all governments try to know, is understanding the most important characteristics of societies in order to make suitable programs for them to gain social development. In this regard, some people believe that if governments' researchers study societies' major cities, they will be able to understand the most important characteristics of these societies. In contrast, I disagree with this approach and I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Studying the major cities helps us to understand societies' economics characteristics that is determiner of other characteristics in all societies. In this regard, some sociologists believe that major cities have been developed by pressure of work forces that have migrated from villages and small cities to cities where have suitable job opportunities, since modern time started. Therefore, they have argued that major cities include suitable mix of all people from all parts of country that help researchers to reveal all characteristics that they have to know. In contrast, I disagree with this approach, because some cities in different countries have not developed just by pressure of work forces. In fact, some major cities developed because of religion reasons and people who live in these cities cannot be suitable simple to understand the most important characteristics of countries, because they do not include all type of people in these countries. You can take Mashhad city in Iran as the best example for this case. This city has been developed, since one of the Islamic religions entered to this city and this city just include people who follow this religion, while there are many different nations and religions in Iran. Thus, in order to understand the most important characteristics of societies, we cannot just focus on major cities.
In the cosmopolitan countries we cannot understand the most important features of these societies just by studying major cities. In this regard, some sociologists have been argued that in the major cities all people usually try to talk with unique language and special culture in order to be like people who run the cities important parts to find suitable job opportunities. Hence, they believe that when we want to know about national characteristics of cosmopolitan countries, if we restrict our research just to major cities, we will not be able to perception different cultures that are in these countries. I agree with this approach, because people from different nations who live in major cities forgot their native languages and cultures, so they cannot help researchers to understand these cultures. You can take one of my cousins as the best example for this case. He is Kurd, but he has been lived in Tehran since he was child, and now he cannot speak by Kurdish language, and he also do not know much things about Kurdish culture. Thus, if we focus on major cities in cosmopolitan countries to understand the most important characteristics of societies, our research will not be complete.
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some people believe that in order to perception the most important feature of societies we have to focus on major cities. In contrast, I argued that this approach is not correct for a couple of reasons. First, some major cities have been developed because of religion reasons and they just include special people in country and cannot be good sample to understand other parts of country, second, in big cities all people try to talk and behavior based on language and culture of cities' runner, hence they cannot be good things to study national characteristics of cosmopolitan countries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ings which all governments try to know, is understanding the most important characteristics of s...
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Line 5, column 1191, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...o follow this religion, while there are many different nations and religions in Iran. Thus, in...
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Line 9, column 996, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
... speak by Kurdish language, and he also do not know much things about Kurdish cult...
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Line 9, column 1008, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...rdish language, and he also do not know much things about Kurdish culture. Thus, if ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, in brief, in contrast, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 33.0505617978 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 97.0 58.6224719101 165% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3118.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 602.0 442.535393258 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17940199336 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95335121839 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92898927225 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.338870431894 0.4932671777 69% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 963.0 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.0812612665 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.476190476 118.986275619 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6666666667 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52380952381 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189453632423 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861376041503 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568866561062 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152722473913 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545338036974 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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