Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? it is more important for students to understand concepts and ideas than its for them to learn facts. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Needless to say, one of the most important things which all parents have to consider about their children, because of its impact on all aspects of children's social and personal lives, is children's learning. Therefore, all parents have always been trying to find suitable schools for their children to improve their learning. In this regard, some people believe that understanding idea and concepts are more important for students than learning facts. I agree with this view and I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Some individuals believe that learning facts helps individuals to find suitable jobs in the future. Such individuals wrongly believe that if individuals want to have a positive impact on interviewer in order to get their attention to occupy the job positions, they must answer interviewer's questions based on different facts which they learned. Therefore, they have posed that based on this fact that schools have to prepare individuals to find suitable jobs in the future, they have to force children to learn facts that are more important than understanding ideas and concepts. In contrast, I disagree with this opinion, because if students cannot learn ideas and concepts they will not be able to learn facts deeply, because these facts originated from concepts and ideas. You can take my cousin as the best example for this case. When he was students his father forced him to learn different facts about his major, then when he went to an interview they could not answer interviewer's questions in the right way, since he had not understood concepts and ideas that were related to these facts. Thus, just learning facts cannot help individuals to find suitable job positions.
If individuals want to be success, they have to learn concepts and ideas when they are students. This topic has been discussed by many sociologists that the majority of them believe that when individuals find job they will face different problems which they do not have experiences about them during their jobs and in order to solve them they have to think based on ideas and concepts which they learned to find suitable solutions for these problems, because concepts and ideas are flexible and individuals can use them for different situations. I agree with this view because, scientists generated them to be true regardless to situations. By way of illustration, I can refer to some statistics that have been published by several international organizations. Based on these statistics approximately, all companies try to hire individuals who know concepts and ideas in their field, because they believe that in modern time that there are a lot of different unknown problems, these individuals can help companies to solve these problems in the best way. Thus, for students understanding concepts and ideas are more important than learning facts.
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some people believe that students have to understand concepts and ideas instead learning facts. I argued that this view is correct for a couple of reasons. First, concepts and ideas will help students to find suitable jobs in the future, second, students who understand concepts and ideas will be able to solve unknown problems that they will face during their jobs in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l face during their jobs in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, then, therefore, thus, in brief, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2773.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15427509294 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70038784222 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.377323420074 0.524837075471 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 820.8 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.4013874381 48.9658058833 197% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.65 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28631691995 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117054417218 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114965919543 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200429898792 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263794510322 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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