Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
In this writing, the author believes that because these baskets have been found only near the prehistoric village of Palea, these baskets have been made just by the Palean people. In the second part of the passage, the writer has posed that recently the archeologists found Palea baskets in Lithos and because there is a deep river between Palea and Lithos if Palea sold these baskets to Lithos, they should have had a boat to cross the river while we cannot found palean boat. Hence, these baskets were not specific for Palean. I think the writer's argument in the passage is not reasonable and I will discuss why I think in this way in the following paragraphs.
First, the writer stated that because these baskets have been found only in the vicinity of the Palean, they were specific for Palauan people. In this argument, the author does not give us sustainable evidence to support his claim and he just talks generally. In this regard, I can say may these baskets had been bought from other people who have extinct during the history and we do not have evidence about them.
Second, the author claimed that since archeologists have not been able to find Palean boats and the river is deep, hence Palean people could not cross river and baskets, which have been found in the Lithos had been made bay Lithos people. This argument is not reasonable, because in ancient time boats had been made by woods and wood products can destroy during the time. Therefore, we can say that Palean boats have been destroyed a long history.
Third, the author without any evidence believes that these baskets had been made in these two villages. How can we be sure that this two village did not buy these baskets from other people who disappear a long history and they had boats or other transportation to care these baskets.
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, the author presented conclusions without reasonable facts to support them. Therefore, I argued that these conclusions cannot be true and if the writer wants to prove his argument, they should provide more scientific facts to support them.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 364 350
No. of Characters: 1705 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.368 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.684 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.25 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.301 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.421 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.654 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.227 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 543, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...re not specific for Palean. I think the writers argument in the passage is not reasonab...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re scientific facts to support them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, while, i think, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 364.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82142857143 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33468482461 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.434065934066 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.5905040718 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.357142857 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313026453835 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129539779662 0.0743258471296 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130135708015 0.0701772020484 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179651422003 0.128457276422 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112597872401 0.0628817314937 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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