Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
In this argument, the writer believes that because archaeologists found some woven baskets in another village than the village of Palea and this new village located across the brime river from Palea and since archaeologists could not find any boat that was necessary to cross this river, these woven baskets were not specific for Palean people. In my opinion this argument is not strong enough and I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
The author has argued that because Bim river is very deep and archeologists could not find Palean boats, therefore they have not been able to cross this deep river, consequently, they could not transit their woven baskets to Lithos. This reason cannot be reasonable for many reasons that I am going to point a couple of them. First, this river is deep at our time and the writer does not explain this river in ancient times, since May this river was not existing in ancient times. Second, because of the lack of palean boats in these sites, the writer must not conclude that they cannot cross the river, because in ancient times people usually made boats by wood and may these boats had destroyed before this research.
In the end, the writer believes that these woven baskets were not unique for Palean people, this conclusion cannot be rational, since the author does not present valuable information about relationships between these two villages. In this regard, I have to say these two villages could branch from one village or tribe, therefore both of them knew how to make these baskets.
In brief, in this argument, the writer has to answer some questions that I will present in this paragraph to convince me about this argument. First, whether palean and Lithos people originating from different tribes or villages? Second, is there any archaeologist evidence that shows us Palean people did not have a boat? Third, whether Bim river was deep like now? Four, according to geologic evidence when this river appeared?
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 334 350
No. of Characters: 1608 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.275 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.814 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.314 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.606 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... them knew how to make these baskets. In brief, in this argument, the writer has...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, as to, in brief, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 334.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95209580838 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38862868396 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488023952096 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.3565095977 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.230769231 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13934211427 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527339118158 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591630765454 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101577799969 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421110750852 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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