do you agree or disagree with the following statement? technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Needless to say, one of the most important children's characteristics which all parents have to try to improve it, because of its impact on all aspects of children's social and personal lives, is creativity. Therefore, all parents have always been trying to enhance children's creativity via different activities which they regulate for their children. In this regard, some people believe that technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. I agree with this view and I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Some individuals believe that in modern time children are more creative because of access to a lot of different technologies. Such people wrongly believe that when children use technology to do their works their mental ability will increase, because they can remove all their mental abilities limits which children had faced in the past. Therefore, these individuals have posed that children in modern time are more intelligent than children in past because of many technologies that are available. In contrast, I disagree with this view because technologies lead to generate computer games which has negative impact on children's mind because of its violent contents. You can take my cousin as the best example for this case. He used to play computer games. Once he felt pain in his head and when he visited doctor, the doctor told him because playing computer games his mind has been damaged and now he cannot focus on works which they have to do. Thus, technology have had negative impact on children's mind.
In modern time different technologies do all difficult tasks for children, hence they do not need to be creative. This topic has been discussed by several sociologists that the majority of them believe that in technologies' era children usually use different software to do their schoolwork and they do not think about them, while in past children had to do their schoolwork independently and they had to think about them very deeply. Therefore, in modern time children cannot develop their creativity, because they do not need to use them to do their works. Therefore, these sociologists have posed that if parents want to have creative children, they should not let them use technologies to do their works especially their schoolwork. By way of illustration, I can refer to some statistics, which have been published by many international organizations. Based on these statistics approximately all creative people who did important inventions in their field had not used technologies to do their tasks when they were children. Thus, in order to be creative, children should avoid using technologies to do their tasks
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some people think that technologies have reduced children's creativity. I argued that this opinion is correct for a couple of reasons. First, using technologies have negative impact on children's mind, second, if children use technologies to do their schoolwork, their mental ability will reduce; consequently, they will become less creative.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, in brief, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2589.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2303030303 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87074474488 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.418181818182 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.951229415 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.285714286 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307100908092 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113367749538 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742251919715 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209077910295 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309267684839 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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