do you agree or disagree with the following statement? playing computer games is a waste of time. children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Needless to say, one of the most important things which is crucial for children and parents have to consider, because of its impact on all aspects of children's personal and social lives, is how children spend their time. Therefore, all parents have always been trying to make suitable programs for their children in order to manage their time in the best way. In this regard, some people believe that playing computer games is a waste of time, hence parents should not let children play them. I agree with this view and I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Some individuals believe that playing computer games is useful for children and parents have to encourage them to play. Such individuals wrongly believe that because computer games are so challenging, they can help children to face difficulties and find solutions for them that helps children to develop new mental passes in their brain that means more mental ability. Therefore, these individuals have posed that parents must let and even encourage their children to play computer games. I disagree with this view, because approximately all computer games have violent contents that have negative impact on children's mind. You can take my cousin as the best example for this case. When he was children, he used to play computer games around 4 hours per day, after sometime he felt pain in their head and when he visited a doctor, the doctor told him that because of playing computer games his mind's cellules had destroyed. Thus, parents must not allow their children to play computer games.
Children must spend most of their time to study their subjects. This topic has been discussed by several sociologists that the majority of them believe that in the modern time in order to find suitable job positions with high salary individuals have to be much knowledgeable and in order to be knowledgeable individuals have to study hard since they are children because the amount of things which they have to learn deeply is so much. Therefore, these sociologists believe that if parents like to have success children in the future they have to manage children's time to spend most of this time to study and they have not to allow children to waste their time by playing computer games. I agree with this opinion, because when children play computer games they will addict them and they have to spend more and more time to play; consequently, they will not able to focus on subjects which they have to learn. Bay way of illustration, I can refer to some statistics which have been published by several international organizations. Based on these statistics approximately all individuals who have suitable job positions, had not played computer games when they were children. Thus, in order to have success children parents must not let them play computer games.
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some people believe that parents should not let children play computer games, because computer games will waste children's valuable time. In this regard, I argued that this view is correct for a couple of reasons. First, computer games usually have negative impact on children's mind, second, children have to spend most of their time to study subjects instead play computer games in order to find suitable jobs in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2774.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9981981982 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52452044431 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.376576576577 0.524837075471 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 843.3 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.384908634 48.9658058833 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.095238095 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4285714286 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321701397413 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134661945639 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831895953288 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2426847453 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0241869942954 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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