Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Needless to say, one of the most important things for all children, because of its impacts on all aspects of their lives, is education. Therefore, all parents have always been trying to encourage their children to pursue fields of study which they can be success individuals based on their knowledge in the future. In this regard, some people believe that it is responsibility of educational institutions to encourage students to pursue fields which help them to find suitable job positions in the future. I agree with this statement and I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Educational institutions can easily reveal students' talents as the most important thing in students' lives that help them to gain success life. In this regard, some psychologists believe that educational institutions are not able to help students to pursue best filed, which can help them to be success person in the future, because they interact with students in short time in every day, hence they do not know much things about students' family relations as the most important thing which shape students' interests. I disagree with this approach, because in the modern time educational institutions usually try to gain information about children's family relationships as much as they can, in order to know more about children mental situations to help students in order to find fields of study that they have to pursue. You can take my cousin as the best example for this case. Now he is around 12 years old and he is studying in one good school where the manager of school tries to have session with his parents every month in order to understand his family relationships. Thus, educational institutions have the most important role to guide students in order to choose best fields.
Teachers have the most impact on their students. According to the majority of sociologists, approximately in all cultures teachers have high social positions among people. Therefore, they have argued that teachers can have big impact on individuals especially students who teachers have more interact with. Hence, these sociologists believe that because of this huge range of impacts educational institutions are able to draw suitable pass for all students by help them to avoid choosing fields which they cannot gain suitable job positions in the future. I agree with this approach because teachers have a lot of experiences about fields of study that can help students to choose best of them. By way of illustration, I can refer to some statistics which have been published by some international organization. Based on these statistics, approximately all success individuals had had good teachers or they had studied in excellent educational institutions that helped them to find fields of study that they like. Thus, teachers are one of the most important factor which influence our successful.
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some people believe that educational institutions have big responsibility about choosing fields of study by students. In this regard, I argued that this statement is correct for a couple of reasons. First, educational institutions can reveal students' talents as the most important things for all individuals, second, teachers because of their high social position are able to encourage students to avoid form choosing not suitable fields of study.
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... choosing not suitable fields of study.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, in brief, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 52.1666666667 174% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2848.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 545.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22568807339 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88964320905 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.376146788991 0.524837075471 72% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.8016247938 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.619047619 100.406767564 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9523809524 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09523809524 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345595353095 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115881962445 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067237604213 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236996232493 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293669963266 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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