Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
Activities like sports and arts form an important part of student carriculum at schools and students get a chance to showcase their tallents besides their academic strengths. Taking away support to these activities and reforming the infrastructure of the school may does sound compromising and but it surely would deprive children and their pportunities.
A child tends to look out for arts and sports activities in his everyday school- it is no doubt an excursion from the mundane lectures they get to hear throughout the day. I will surely crush them to know that the school can no longer fund teachers or support competitions for them as there will be some who would be emotionally dependant on those activities. I have ever been too enthusiastic about my art classes during my school time- although I always liked these periods to get out of those boring science lectures or draining math sessions. There were some who had a flair in art and used to come to school only to enjoy those art sessions and workshops, I could not imagine the plight of all of us if our school had to cut off our arts sessions to divert resources to building repairs. The responsibility of maintaining steady funds is of the trustees, why should children bear with the consequesces?
With the time the building repairs are taking place, the students might miss out on certain opportunities like competitions or workshops. Sports needs continous practice and regular competition experience, if that is snatched away from children, they tend to lose out their chances of participation which may not come back again. Imagine a football team which has worked hard throughout the year and is promising to bring accolades for their school this year- the school will depreive themselves as well as the entire team by regulating funds to buiding repairs. After the repairs are done and the chidren get back their chance, they may not perform the same this time, considering the gap which they have had during the season.
The decision needs to be deliberated upon when it comes to safety of the students as well. If the repairs demand signinficant amount of funds and if the school cannot afford it, than the school needs to take care of it and suspend all other activities for some time. At the cost of the everyone's safety, I think arts and sports can take a break for some time. Imagine if the repairs are not mended and the schools continue to ignore them- the children could face a precarious situations and the school might face untoward incidents if any student gets hurt or gets injured due to undue maintainence.
Therefore schools need to reconsider the students perspective before takeing away their funding. Many depend on these opportunities but also be careful and ensure their safety.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, well, i think, no doubt, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2318.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 471.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92144373673 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70020126278 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51804670913 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2833906754 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.352941176 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7058823529 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370609660662 0.243740707755 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112711527634 0.0831039109588 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681978812944 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19890753717 0.150359130593 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876691460826 0.0667264976115 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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