Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
School is a holy ground for each and every students, be it a small kid at kindergarten or a post grad pursuing the doctoral degree. School is the place where we get the light of education and it acts as a moulder which eventually shapes our knowledge, behaviour and personality. every school`s aim is to confer its student best experience of learning - not merely for the sake of passing the final exams. Thus, every school, beside the usual task of academic activities, keep extra curricular activities in top priority to aid in overall development of its students. Extra curricular activities such as sports, arts, annual functions and so on not only aid as a break the redundancy of academic activities, but also serve as a platform for the students to discover their hidden talents. Hence, these activities are not to be subjected to alteration when it comes to aid for the other tasks of school as repair and maintenance.
Extra curricular activities are incorporated in the academic calendar of most of the schools and budget is likewise allocated. However, the budget for extra curricular activities must not be cut to fund for any other repair activities. The repair cost of any building constitutes a substantial amount and if these sum are to be allocated by cutting the fund for extra curricular activities, then it may alter the whole academic calendar. It can be further substantiated by what happened in my school when I was in tenth grade. At that time, my school had a new block to be build beside its primary block and since the cost required was huge, school administration had to cut off all other extra curricular activities for that year to fund the repair task. There was no any functions or sport event in that year and probably, it was the worst year I have had in my entire school life. Moreover, many students were refrained from participating in nationwide and district level competition due to lack of fund. Thus,it had terrible impact on the dynamics of whole year.
However, there are certainly a lot of alternative way in which the school can appropriate the required budget for funding the repair task. Various fund raising programmes, exhibition, cultural shows and concert can be organized for fund raising. This will not only aid the school administration, but all the students as a whole as this opens way for more extracurricular events. Similarly, another way could be asking for donation. There are indeed, if not many, few who are generous to aid the school. Certainly, from among the parents of students the donation can be obtained which can help the administration to fulfill their goal without altering the academic calendar.
Finally, the repair and maintenance may be pressing issue, there are rather imaginative way to allocate fund other than cutting the fund from the extracurricular activities which every administration ought to abide by.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, similarly, so, then, thus, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2415.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 485.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9793814433 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92597801693 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490721649485 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8419636682 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0952380952 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367408421477 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114654881239 0.0831039109588 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680537898148 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221980400903 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483589250186 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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