All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the company to operate more efficiently. If companies were to spend more time listening to their own employees, such consultants would be unnecessary.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with these statements and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statements might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In this fast paced world, the competition and desire for success has been the main goal of almost all the companies and corporations. To thrive in this highly demanding and competitive market, they want to make sure that every aspects of their company - from employee welfare to consumers welfare, is fit and running impeccably. So, most of them hire outside consultants or some skilled consultants to operate more efficiently. Indeed, it may seem plausible in many cases but that may not be necessarily true to each case and there are possibly better ways around.
The employee of any organization is its heart. The employee working in any company embrace the working condition and environment and are more concerned with the overall goal. This is often true as the employees are more familiar with the preset goals and objective of the company as a whole, and no outsiders are more concerned and close to the company than the employees themselves. So, they wish for the welfare of their company in a similar manner as any mother or father in a family always work for the welfare and prosperity of their own family. My father used to work in a fruit juice producing company. In his company, there used to be one meeting each month comprising each employees. The main aim of the meeting would be centered on the efficient organization of the company as a whole. So, the meeting used to open up on various subject matters that the major board members would have not been too concerned about or may have overlooked them. As a result, every meeting used to end up with addressing various issues within the company and also with the strategies to overcome them. This certainly have helped the company to compete with the other companies around the district.
However, there may be more complicated issues that might ascertain the requirement of hiring the outside consultant. More often in the large multinational companies, one wouldn't deem necessary to listen to the arguments of each and every employees and it is not even possible. However, these companies have board members or such designation within their ranks who are solely functioning for the efficient operation of their firm. These titled members within the company are without doubt the employee of the company. It may seem relevant to hire the outside consultant if the issues are beyond their grasp. As an example, if the cases of environmental pollution and sustainability are to be addressed, then the company may be obliged to hire outsider temporarily to solve the issue.
At last, as it may seem reasonable to hire outside consultant in certain cases, but in most cases these are deemed unnecessary and can easily be overcome with the general discussion and constructive meetings among the employees within the company.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a similar manner" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...y wish for the welfare of their company in a similar manner as any mother or father in a family alw...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... the large multinational companies, one wouldnt deem necessary to listen to the argumen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, then, as a result, in many cases, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2333.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98504273504 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71616852912 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470085470085 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1097618349 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.095238095 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349369346198 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104959793553 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658622540355 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207956522762 0.150359130593 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774301654671 0.0667264976115 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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