Scientists and other researchers should focus their research on areas that are likely to benefit the greatest number of people.

The topic suggests that the aim of scientific research should be to benefit as many as people they can. However, I largely disagree with the issue for several reasons. The following essay will argue why.
Admittedly, when the research is on the urgent need and poses threat to huge number of people, the research which benefit as many as people might be prioritized. For instance, when the new epidemic disease such as SARS or a new type of flu occurred, the scientists and researchers should develop a new vaccine and medicine to prevent further spread of the disease since it threatens millions of lives on earth. However, when there is enough time and budget, it is unjustifiable to confine the research area to those with a public purpose.
That is because research does not always target the general public. In many cases, research sheds lights on non-human world. For instance, environmental scientists, they focuses on the ecosystem. They examine the relationship between organisms in a certain ecosystem and discover ways to prevent sources of ecosystem destruction. These research does not give direct benefits to people, however, they are necessary to solve environmental problems in the future. Therefore, even though the scientific research is not giving the immediate impact on the public, it is crucial and required for the future.
In addition, it is uncertain whether the right of the minority can be ignored by the concerns of the majority of people. Should patients suffering from rare disease, such as dyslexia, deserve to be left uncured since there is not many people suffering? Maybe not. Every individual has the equal right to be treated with equal level of attention and thus the research on these rare disease should be conducted as well. That is, based on the equal right of individuals, it is unjust for researchers to focus on major issues.
To sum up, the topic is widely accepted, but it should not be the norm for scientific research. This is because the research is not only done for human, but also for the non-human beings, and the right of every individual is equal. Therefore, it is undesirable to confine the purpose of every research to benefit as many as people.

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Average: 5.5 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 54, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...use research does not always target the general public. In many cases, research sheds lights o...
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Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'focus'
Suggestion: focus
...nstance, environmental scientists, they focuses on the ecosystem. They examine the rela...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in addition, such as, in many cases, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 370.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96486486486 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69825174036 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491891891892 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 4.96107784431 262% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6591304702 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6842105263 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4736842105 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.10526315789 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30769096219 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940027992796 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716115876397 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175705518931 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050860477219 0.0628817314937 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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flaws:
1. in the third paragraph, it is about ecosystem and people, but the topic is actually about a few people and a large number of people.

we may argue like:

there are a small amount now, but maybe there are a big amount in the future, or

there are a small amount in a small area, but maybe there are a big amount across the globe soon.

2. the fourth paragraph is not the style of GRE argument, we may argue like:

suppose only one person suffers for one disease, but maybe

a. it is hidden for other people, for example, the relatives, next generations;

b. it has transferred to other people, but not detected yet with current technologies.

c. the disease may have different sub diseases, etc ....

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 370 350
No. of Characters: 1785 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.386 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.824 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.594 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.941 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.043 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5