“Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.”
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Every species on Earth is a shining star, ornamenting our mother nature. Though biodiversity argues that saving endangered species is time consuming and costly to execute, I still approbate the endeavor people have made, and that species to preserve those animals and plants should not depend on what cause them endangered.
Most humans have reached a consensus that many species that face extinction are mostly germane to our activities, such as forest cultivation, hunting, etc. Therefore, some may propose that our responsibility to save the species is restricted only to those that are affected by us. They may take Darwin’s theory as an explanation, which assume that species on Earth are always appearing and disappearing, and that it has been a continuous process for billions of years to ensure the species are dynamically tuned to the environment. For example, dinosaurs and mammoth elephants are surely not “supposed to” exist now, since the climate does not fit their body. Also, much of the solutions for saving species are staggering costs for governments, some of them even ban stop the developing countries from economic growth, in order to save species. It would be uneven and certainly intrude intruding the soverignitysovereignty of specific nation, since they cannot decide how they are going to develop their countries. Brazil is one of the famous examples. They faced a dilemma of whether to continue cultivating the Amazon rainforest, or to stop chopping trees and sacrifice their paper industry. Some would then insist that as long as the species are not severely affected by the activities, Brazilians should be free to do what they want, instead of being supervised by other countries.
Nevertheless, those who advocated to save species that face extinction due to humans cannot even precisely identify whether each of them is under human’s threat. It has been known that extinction occurs sue due to temperature, habitats, rainfall, or even magnetic field from the Earth. Also, it is sometimes impossible to select specific species to preserve and omit the other, since many species live in the same place. Moreover, although Darwin’s theory is somewhat a mainstream view towards evolution, the minor species on the plant are still valuable to discover, since they provide lots of information of what happened, and the environmental status in different times. No one would reject a fossil of an extinct animal or plant, rather taking it with care and investigating it thoroughly; then it should also be fascinating to preserve endangered species, which is as exciting to explore the sensation of life.
Biodiversity and species preserving have been highly debated. Although some may argue to do it passively and present human’s least duty to ensure economic growth, I see every animal and plant as irreplaceable and dazzling, and more efforts is needed to keep the wildlife. In this way, not only we can learn from the species, but is also more realistic to execute species preserve as a whole.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 366, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ion, which assume that species on Earth are always appearing and disappearing, and that it has been ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, still, then, therefore, as for, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2555.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22494887526 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9058693071 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 204.123752495 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533742331288 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 807.3 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8727774922 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.473684211 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7368421053 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230517700624 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704561855745 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049872608308 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144355591847 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328827818252 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 98.500998004 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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