Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The world has turned into a race with everyone rooting for the first place. Becoming a leader in the numerous fields requires one to a good human first and then a leader. Leaders who are able to bring everyone together and work happily is proffered rather than someone who only is a didactic in speech.In my opinion, it will be advantageous to instill a sense of cooperation than competition into the young minds from the early stages of their education.
First of all, cooperation as it means is a way of working together in harmony and peace. Industries, within themselves, have various kinds of professionals working together to get the work done. In this situation, one needs to be able to adapt the various culture of work that the people exhibit. One cannot make a fuss in their workplace pertaining to someone's behavior. For example, if the industry is related to e-commerce then it will have employees from sectors like information technology , marketing, sales and software developers. The tech people often prefer eccentric hours of work while the commerce have no problem working during the day. This could lead problems between the two fields regarding them not working the same or equal hours. This should not bother an individual to the extend of them being troubled at work. Working together in harmony would mean to respect all kinds of prefferences and also keeping your own prefferences in place and still be able to be productive to the industry. Doing so at early ages will help students to understand better and gain more experience before entering the real world.
Second of all, a leader has been stereotyped to have qualities like good personality, eloquent in speech and also cooperating in manner. A leader has to deal with various kinds of people with their different problems, If that leader is unable to resolve these issues and maintain a stability in the place of work then this could lead to them being labled as unworthy of the position. Hence, during the young ages children could be taught to resolve such issues and given relevant experiences.
Lastly, competition has lead to people developing negative emotions like guilt, anger , jealousy. Having these emotions at a young age could lead to failure. I do not say that competition is a bad thing, but with competition there is winning and loosing and there is always only "one winner " and the others are "losers"
or incompetent. Inbuilding such ideas into the minds of children will give rise to unnecessary thoughts and restrain from the child from eve trying. The world will only congratulate the winner, when infact, everyone should be congratulated and lauded for their efforts and given equal consideration. Living with the idea of "cooperation" will have various other positive effects like love, respect and patience towards others and this is what should be inculcated in a good human.
That said, in conclusion, many would still argue that competition is a better way of education young children to face the very harsh world that is out there. Yes, considering that it also leads to many others failing to try or make efforts because of the demotivation that is brought due to the competition. Hence, to prepare people for roles like leadership in the various fields of work , a sense of coorperation should be instilled so that they not only be good leaders but also good humans.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, lastly, regarding, second, so, still, then, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2852.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 570.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00350877193 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83431339474 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484210526316 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 881.1 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3315746137 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.08 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252209494109 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664110522484 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543963022433 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140358364456 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288638762771 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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