Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Society needs to prepare people from a young age for various challenges in life.This preparation helps to shape their professional personal well being in the future.The teenagers who are roaming around carefree today will run the country in the future.Hence, it is extremely important that their early training is well planned.The prompt suggests that the best way to prepare them for various professions is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation rather than competition.I do not completely agree with this, as in my opinion, competition is a crucial factor when it comes to professional life in the increasingly globalizing world due to the following two factors.
Firstly, the best well known people in either field, be it leadership or engineering or buiseness have reached where they are today due to their neich of becoming the best.For example, during school if we did not see our friends and classmates as our competition in performance, then we might have not performed this well.It is this feeling of getting ahead , that makes people from an early age to perform better than everyone else.This in turn improve them individually.Without the sense of competition it would be difficult to see the areas of improvement that a person might have.Therefore, we can safely assume that competition is what keep people at their toes and bring out the best in them.
Further, a sense of cooperation drives innovation.It is this feeling of getting ahead of one another that keep people wondering what else they can do that can set them apart from the crowd.For instance, if various organisations that manufactor cell phones suddenly stop getting driven by competition then market will not see so many new cell phones or technologies developed in such a short time frame.It is competition that pushes all the people working for these oraganisations to perform to their maximum capacity.Today, due to this we can see various samrt phone options appearing with new features in very competitive prices.Hence, customers get to choose from a variety of options.This shows that competition is what makes people thinks of new ideas and work on them.
Some may definitely argue that a sense of cooperation needs to be instilled in people from early age for the greater good of entire humanity.It is indeed true,and there is a fine line between healthy and unhealthy competition.In this respect government can initiate new programes to educate people about cooperation and collective thinking.But this may not be something that needs to replace a sense of healthy competition.Instead government should encourage a sense of healthy competition in people from an early age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, well, apart from, for example, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2243.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 431.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20417633411 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16642214645 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524361948956 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.2370786517 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 107.0 23.0359550562 464% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.7183234318 60.3974514979 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 560.75 118.986275619 471% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 107.75 23.4991977007 459% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 30.75 5.21951772744 589% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 7.80617977528 333% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163725694556 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108349490343 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354386847259 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108349490343 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354386847259 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 56.9 14.1392134831 402% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -37.13 48.8420337079 -76% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 20.3 7.92365168539 256% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 45.0 12.1743820225 370% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.06 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.39 8.38706741573 148% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 62.0 11.8971910112 521% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 44.8 11.2143820225 399% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 45.0 11.7820224719 382% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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