Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
The author states that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. I disagree with the view of author that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
College is a highly competitive environment. Everybody that comes to college wants to succeed and come out on top. In such a scenario a student can perform his best only when he enjoys his studies. And the only way to do that is by selecting the field of study which he likes. If a student dislikes his field of study, then overtime he may lose the motivation to study and work hard. This may ultimately result in wastage of time, money as well as other resources. Even if a student manages to scrap by his time during college and works hard, gets a job, will he be happy? Over time such a decision will lead to decrease in efficiency and productivity and only lead to regret. College education is not cheap nowadays. If a student fails to perform at college, then he will struggle in order to pay off the student loan. Hence to avoid such a situation in future, a student must study a subject that he likes and can excel at.
People might say going to college is of no use, if you cannot find a job at the end of your education. But one should do well to remember that in order to succeed and find a decent job a person has to have good knowledge of that field. A student’s field of liking may have lesser number of jobs as compared to other fields which he dislikes but has more job’s, however will he excel at a job that he dislikes? No. If a student selects his field of liking and struggles at a start then that is fine, but over the years hardwork that he has put in and experience he has gained will reap rich dividends of happiness and prosperity.
Hence, In order to succeed, college students should select a field based on their liking rather than selecting a field, which might have more number of jobs but the student will find difficult to excel in.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...e in order to pay off the student loan. Hence to avoid such a situation in future, a ...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...t loan. Hence to avoid such a situation in future, a student must study a subject that he...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tudent will find difficult to excel in.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, well, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37172774869 5.05705443957 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43716574532 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44502617801 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 529.2 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1424070651 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7777777778 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417481793475 0.243740707755 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156791206061 0.0831039109588 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.159302120146 0.0758088955206 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.333578053961 0.150359130593 222% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.158136533421 0.0667264976115 237% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 12.1639044944 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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