The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
The argument stated in the letter says that if skateboarding is prohibited in the central plaza then the business will return to previously high levels. While the argument may seem logical and probable, many more information needs to be gathered before taking a decision.
The argument states that business has been declining steadily for the last two years and skateboarding has increased dramatically. It further adds that many store owners believe that decrease in business is due to increase in number of skateboarders. However the stated belief is not bolstered with figures. It may be the case that business may be decreasing because of a new store opened nearby central plaza which may be selling better quality items with cheaper rates compared to the store owner. So a survey should be conducted to figure out the reasons for decrease in business.
Additionally, it may also be possible that only a few store owners believe that the business has been decreasing because of the dramatic rise in skateboarding. Hence data regarding how many store owners believe the above argument needs to be found.
The argument further states that there is an increase in litter and vandalism. On what basis does the argument state that there has been an increase in litter and incidents of vandalism?A research needs to be done before coming to an conclusion. In additionit further adds that by prohibiting skateboarding, business will increase to previously high levels. How will prohibiting skateboarding result in increase in businesses? Rather it might be the case that because of skateboarding activities the number of families visiting central plaza might have increased. This may be because skateboarding provides a past time for kids while parents carry out shopping. Thus more information needs to be gathered.
To sum up, the above questions need to be answered by conducting research before going ahead with the recommendation of prohibiting skateboarding in central plaza.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 318 350
No. of Characters: 1636 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.223 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.145 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.883 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.706 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.306 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.344 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 251, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...to increase in number of skateboarders. However the stated belief is not bolstered with...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... of the dramatic rise in skateboarding. Hence data regarding how many store owners be...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... store owners believe the above argument needs to be found. The argument further...
^^
Line 4, column 186, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: A
...se in litter and incidents of vandalism?A research needs to be done before coming...
^
Line 4, column 186, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: Research
...se in litter and incidents of vandalism?A research needs to be done before coming to an co...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 231, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...earch needs to be done before coming to an conclusion. In additionit further adds ...
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Line 4, column 367, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'prohibit'
Suggestion: prohibit
...ase to previously high levels. How will prohibiting skateboarding result in increase in bus...
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Line 4, column 427, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...rding result in increase in businesses? Rather it might be the case that because of sk...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 609, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...may be because skateboarding provides a past time for kids while parents carry out shoppi...
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Line 4, column 662, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... kids while parents carry out shopping. Thus more information needs to be gathered. ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, thus, while, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.261829653 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97316561926 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476340694006 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.2731637804 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1176470588 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6470588235 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242571266121 0.218282227539 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841789637531 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591609203933 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148843988099 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040500149652 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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