Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporation, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
While some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to contribute to the society, others believe that making money is the only purpose of a corporation. It is undeniable that corporations need money in order to survive. In my opinion, however, all companies have a duty to ensure the well-being of the societies and environments in which they are a part beside business jobs.
On the one hand, contributing to the development of a society is beneficial to a corporation in many cases. Taking Vinfast and Samsung as examples, one is a domestic car company and another is an international incorporation respectively, but both of them have been operated their factories in rural areas of Vietnam. By doing so, they have been created millions of job opportunities for Vietnamese people, even the ones who do not know the first thing about electronic devices or mechanism can be trained before joining the manufacturing processes. In this circumstance, corporations can not only ensure the supply of their labor force, but also receive an abundant of support from local authority such as special tax policy. Moreover, the reputation in social acts will leave a good impression in their customer, therefore results in the increase in sales and profits. Thus, I believe that the more corporations contribute to the societies that they are located in, the more they will receive as return.
On the other hand, the eagerness to make as much money as possible without taking responsibility for the well-being of the societies and environments may be counterproductive. For example, Vedan, which is used to be a top company in producing MSG in Vietnam, drained their wastewater directly to Thi Vai River in order to cut down the revenue spent on wastewater treatment. Contaminants in wastewater was attributed to the death of several creatures living under the water. In consequence, Vietnamese customers boycotted all products under this brand which leaded to the worst financial crisis of Vedan during the period of 8 years from 2008 to 2016.
In conclusion, all corporations should consider social duty as an important factor that contributes to the development of their businesses instead of neglecting it. Even though they have an economic desire to make more profits, corporations also should think long-term about actions they take which could hurt their companies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in many cases, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23237597911 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11750440626 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563968668407 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4265615276 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.6 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5333333333 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 5.21951772744 204% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353331958255 0.243740707755 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108183183146 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104592794718 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218551215859 0.150359130593 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120960252967 0.0667264976115 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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