Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
I strongly disagree with the statement and would argue that students should be encouraged to pursue courses that interest them whether these courses are supposed to be trivial and cannot lead to success.
Some people may argue that in our increasingly globalized economy competition for jobs has skyrocketed, thus it is imperative that students should pursue practical paths. However, the job market is ever shifting, thus no one can guarantee that the current ‘hot’ jobs will still possess dizzying prospects after one graduate from college. For example, in the 2000s, finance and banking was rapidly growing field in Vietnam, thus many students put it on the top of the list when they registered for colleges without much consideration. Unfortunately, a few years later, Vietnam had suffered from one of the most severe finance crisis in the history, and as a result, an abundant of employees lost their jobs, and those who indeed were not interested in this field could easily give up and found another way to earn for a living. Therefore, if someone choose his/her profession based solely on its ‘promising’ opportunities, it is definitely unwise for a long run.
Further, if we assume that the job market is not dynamic, and the probability for the same finance crisis happened is negligible, one should still be encouraged to pursue his or her interest because our happiness plays a crucial role in how effectively we work. If a student who is passionate about classical music pragmatically chooses the path of computer programing because of the plethora of lucrative job opportunities, she runs the risk of finding no satisfaction in this job. She might go to work each day, complete her programming tasks haphazardly and submit subpar jobs. With this working attitude, it would be unsurprising that she will not achieve any rewards and success in her career. Thus, one is most likely to do the best job possible when he or she can do what they love.
In conclusion, instead of dissuading students’ desires, educational institutions ought to equip them with solid background in knowledge and social skills in order to encourage young generation to follow their passion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 850, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...arn for a living. Therefore, if someone choose his/her profession based solely on its ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 358.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13966480447 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90365782044 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625698324022 0.4932671777 127% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.4772684568 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.333333333 118.986275619 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8333333333 23.4991977007 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 5.21951772744 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0822039972875 0.243740707755 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0305538094618 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267423231699 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0605819546604 0.150359130593 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238749902963 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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