Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
The term "arts" refers to a broad category of musical, physical, and visual-spatial practices, but in essence it contains the ideas of self-expression, creativity, and freedom. The arts connect cultures when people do not speak the same language, with visual images transcending the boundaries of language. Even within people who speak the language, the arts provide a channel for communicating ideas, emotions, and values in a way that words alone cannot. The arts then, broad as the term is, are an important part of any culture. Therefore some people believe that the government should take an active role in funding the arts so that they can flourish and be available to all people. However, other believe that government funding threaten the very essence of art. My opinion is that though government funding is beneficial rather than harmful to the the field of art.
The most beneficial part of government funding would be in art education. Because children contain the future's vision, they need to have an education that develops them not only mentally, but also in their creativity and their ability to connect with others. The arts are the most affordable way to bring children in touch with this ability. The most ideal method would be to provide each child with a wise mentor to help him become enlightened, but as this is not feasible due to the shortage of such ready-to-work mentors and the costs of such a program. The arts, however, allow children to have a medium that helps them develop their skills and learn such things as dedication, practice, craftsmanship, and to experience the pride of presenting their creations. Government funding in this case would help children gain access to art programs. Currently, a rigorous education in the arts is taught only in exclusive private schools, and even public schools have cut the visual arts, physical education, and music from their programs completely due to lack of funding. Government funding of the arts would help bring these programs to a greater number of students instead of to a select few.
For people who completely disagree with the notion of government funding, they might argue that art in the past has not been financed by government but by private aristocracy. They might argue that government funding is not necessary - after all, the great pieces of Michaelangelo were by commission and not funded by the government. They might also argue that government funding would limit creativity and self-expression, as the government would have an agenda. However, though many of the famous paintings in history were funded by either individuals or organizations, the act of funding did not limit the quality, creativity, or self-expression of the artists. The Mona Lisa by Leonardo da Vinci did not have any less brilliance or genius due to the fact that it was a commissioned project. Whether this funding is from a private individual or from the government makes little difference. The paintings on the ceilings of the Sistine Chapel were commissioned by the Chuch, which in those times had as much, or even more, authority than our current government. However, though the work was funded, and though there was a very pointed agenda of Christian theology, the work itself is still no less a great artwork than if it were created for the purpose of self-expression.
The arts has tied in with its name the ideas of creativity and self-expression, and the notion of government funding, which carries agenda and politics, doesn't tie well with these ideas. However, funding of art works in the past have not diminished their value, and more importantly, government funding is greatly needed in the field of art. The area that needs the most support is art education of students, as this creates the greatest long term benefits for the public.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, well, after all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3197.0 2235.4752809 143% => OK
No of words: 633.0 442.535393258 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05055292259 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01592376844 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8815480681 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456556082148 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 963.9 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 16.0 4.99550561798 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 14.0 1.77640449438 788% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8740759278 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.961538462 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3461538462 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.57692307692 5.21951772744 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429094000194 0.243740707755 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137998506186 0.0831039109588 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131516220659 0.0758088955206 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275204741544 0.150359130593 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115877966663 0.0667264976115 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 100.480337079 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.