Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Art has multiple functions to a society, and I would argue a society can better benefit from the art only when it is highly available to the majority. Thus, I personally agree with the first intent more in that government funding may be the most critical part to sustain the art and fulfill its most potential to a society for the following reasons.
The first principle for art to survive is the appreciation from the mass. However, art itself is not a necessity for daily life, in a sense that people won’t die from lack of art, and that is why government funding can play a vital role to encourage people to participate in art though they may not find it is important in the first place. Further, art is generally pricey and for people who are with limited living budgets may find it difficult to pay for art even though they are truly interested in it. Indeed, it is not difficult to imagine that the blue collar workers with low wages choose to buy milk over the gallery ticket, so it again illustrates that government funding can largely help people to remove the obstacles of getting close to art, both in motivation and monetary facets.
On the other hand, it is costly to produce high quality art, but it is challenging to get the investment on art back if the appreciation of the art market is small, like what has been described above. Not to mention, certain forms of arts don’t create direct lucrative value, which makes it difficult for artists to survive. For example Van Gough is famous for his masterpieces in the modern world, but he was really poor and lived in a terrible condition when he was still alive. In order to avoid the same suffering and encourage more talents to create great art, the direct monetary support from the government will be essential. To be specific, the government funding can free artists’ worry from the lack of money and focus more on the spiritual function that art is meant to bring. Then the positive cycle will be formed, in that more artists with great minds join the art worlds and lead to a more popular and welcomed society for arts.
In conclusion, art can be flourished only when healthy demand and supply of art exists. Therefore, government funding can critically help to remove the monetary challenge for the art world to grow and lead to a society that can better benefit from the widespread use of art.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, really, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64691943128 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48790452395 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495260663507 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.5359286161 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.071428571 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1428571429 23.4991977007 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 5.21951772744 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424988629667 0.243740707755 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177148360426 0.0831039109588 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822598995948 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301335352761 0.150359130593 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456115214249 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 48.8420337079 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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