Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Art literally means creative activity. The author has presented two contrasting views of two dissimilar group of people.
One, that believes that funding towards the field of art should be made available by the government to ensure that it can bloom and
is also made available to people. However the other group contradicts the earlier because it visualizes this government funding towards
art can corrupt the originality of it which will result in loosing the integrity of it. While I understand the views of the second group, but
I am more closely aligned with the first one, reasons for which have been illustrated throughout this essay.
Those people who do not believe that the funding should be provided fear the change in the world of art. Art being a very generic term, let me
specify the various we are talking about. It could be the world of artists or painters, art of acting, art of music, art of writing, art of photography
and many more. If we see the history of any area of art, we have come a long way with many changes over the period of time, which makes me declare this
change as inevitable. This junta feels that the originality of art should not erode. Even though I believe that there are some deviations that occur, but
isn't that deviation that is required or as justified by its name "Arts".
Now as it is clear that the name of this creativity or changes in a pleasing way is art, then why stop it. Now as we know that these changes
are inevitable then why try to hinder it. Just in the name of preserving cultural traditions, which is definitely important but how about creating more?
Isn't that more positive way of looking at things. We are not loosing the originality, the classic music that was produced decades back, or the paintings
made hundreds of years back are still preserved and cherished. By providing funds to the world of art will help people to bring the creativity of their wonderful
minds out, something that will be cherished by coming generations. Definitely, keeping in mind that this birth of new world of art is at the cost of demolishing our
ancestral ones.
Illustrating, what I stated above with an example, Verli painting very peculiar to the West of India is a painting where human trees everything is represented in stick
forms. This is hundreds of years old way of painting, recently I countered a small variation done to it in a museum where it was a combination of sticks and dots.
This variation looked more appealing than the original and has become a trend, clothes are coming up with this type of painting now, mobile covers can be seen painted
with this type, hence has gained popularity. If we see here no one has destroyed the earlier version of it, its just that the new idea had added up to the existing art,
hence increasing the spectrum of paintings.
As it is evident that promoting art is for the betterment of the society and paying contributions to the world of art itself, it should be promoted and supported with the
funds by the government so that it can be made easily available to the masses to try their creativity. We can preserve and create a history simultaneously.
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...sualizes this government funding towards art can corrupt the originality of it wh...
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... originality of it which will result in loosing the integrity of it. While I understand th...
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... the name of this creativity or changes in a pleasing way is art, then why stop it. Now as we kno...
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...trees everything is represented in stick forms. This is hundreds of years old way...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, second, so, still, then, while, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 64.0 33.0505617978 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2648.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 558.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74551971326 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67041206124 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494623655914 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 818.1 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.750367106 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.333333333 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70833333333 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.97078651685 443% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340583190745 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990654951671 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102863244098 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106031141884 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101238631276 0.0667264976115 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.