Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented above.
In today's world most of the population are familiar to media be it television, newspaper, or applications on the phone and the content which they imbibe influence their daily habits and nature. It is true peer groups and parental role models have a powerful influence on children's behavior, but if there is constant exposure to things which may seem to be enthralling to the child's mind it will be more influenctional.
Firstly, if not all Indians most of the Indians are cricket fans and watch matches whenever they can. When a child watches the Indian captain Virat Kohli on television aggresively abusing the opposition player this impacts the mind of the child. Thinking if the Indian cricket team captain is doing it why can't I. There has certainly been a rise in the despicable behaviour of children using abusive language without giving it a thought.
Adding further to it, children are highly influenced by fictional characters which they watch on the televsion. Children are fascinated especially by superhereos trying to emulate them have caused quite a few moments of trouble for them. One of my personal experience of me climbing on top of my cupboard pretending to be spiderman fell from the top of the cupboard breaking my arm. All this because I wanted to become like him.
Furthermore, the bollywood industry there are movies which have portrait the protagonist in such a way that he gets the girl always even though the girl is not interested eventually falls for the main lead in the movie by constant effort put by him. This has influenced the audience watching alot. The reports of harrasment by women have increased in the past several years. Eaves dropping has become common because the mentality of persuading a girl until she gives in to you has been instilled by such
To conclude, Both the factors play an important role in developing the character of a person. It is possible that it can do good or bad depending on what type of exposure the child is getting. However, in today's world you cannot control what information the child is getting because there are so many sources through which the child can get influenced and is always exposed to some kind of media.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ns and watch matches whenever they can. When a child watches the Indian captain Vira...
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Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...an cricket team captain is doing it why cant I. There has certainly been a rise in t...
^^^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...an cricket team captain is doing it why cant I. There has certainly been a rise in t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 504, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ves in to you has been instilled by such To conclude, Both the factors play an im...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, kind of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85904255319 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68186272494 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574468085106 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5467040353 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.1875 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145721810834 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433718783956 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056155297868 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0743799895216 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535834411852 0.0667264976115 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ns and watch matches whenever they can. When a child watches the Indian captain Vira...
^^^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...an cricket team captain is doing it why cant I. There has certainly been a rise in t...
^^^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...an cricket team captain is doing it why cant I. There has certainly been a rise in t...
^^^^
Line 7, column 504, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ves in to you has been instilled by such To conclude, Both the factors play an im...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, kind of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85904255319 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68186272494 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574468085106 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5467040353 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.1875 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145721810834 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433718783956 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056155297868 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0743799895216 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535834411852 0.0667264976115 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.