Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior.
The portrayal of violence on the media and its effects on viewers has been a trendy debate topic for years now. The prompt suggests two reasons for the increase in violence in the society, especially among children; the increase in violence showed in the media and the influence of peer groups or parental role models. I strongly agree with the latter and argue peer groups and parental role models are a bigger influence on children’s behavior.
First of all, charity at begins at home. Children tend to imitate what they see or hear in their immediate environment. So parents play a huge role in shaping the behavior of their children. How? The character, behavior, or acts of the parents may influence their child or children. For instance, a child who grows up in an abusive home may tend to be more aggressive than a child that grew up in a peaceful, loving home. Children at a younger age do not know the difference between good and bad, so if a child is repeatedly exposed to violence at a young age, such child may think violence is okay and will grow up with that mindset. The same goes for what is depicted in the media, a child may start a fight after watching a Kung Fu or Boxing match trying to imitate what he/she just saw on TV. However, the difference is that, what children see on the media can be regulated through parental guidance. Almost all media platforms now allow parents or guardians to control the kind of content their children sees, unlike children witnessing violence in their homes or environment in real life which can hardly be controlled.
Secondly, like the saying goes, “show me your friend and I will tell you who you are”. This is a direct representation of the influence peer groups can have on people, especially children. Children are generally considered naïve, and if they have friends who engage in violence, they may also resort to violent acts too so as to “look cool” to their friends or “feel among”. Peer groups influence children much more than the media because children readily have more access to friends than the media. Even if children have uncontrolled access to media, violent habits can be easily noticed by their parents and quickly corrected.
However, that is not to undermine the effects of media on children, especially social media. The social media, for instance, is filled with foul languages, profanity, and other forms of violence and aggressive acts. Children can easily pick up these bad habits and start practicing or showing them in real life. However, the difference between media influence and peer group or parental influence is that media influence can be curbed. Several social media platforms have algorithms in place that detects and remove violent words, music, or videos, so kids don’t see them. There are also age limits that prevent children of certain age from viewing certain content considered too young for their age so they don’t get influenced negatively.
In conclusion, both the media and peer groups and parental role models can influence children negatively. However, I mostly agree that peer group and parental influence plays a much more significant role in influencing children’s behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...hey may also resort to violent acts too so as to “look cool” to their friends or “feel a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2681.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 540.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96481481481 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59717254194 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453703703704 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 801.9 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8177821852 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.24 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.427756078501 0.243740707755 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148217971871 0.0831039109588 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117696701147 0.0758088955206 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303296341225 0.150359130593 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10269596508 0.0667264976115 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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