Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behaviour.
This is true that children's behaviour depend on the environment in which he/she lives. A person learns what it sees, what it hears and what it feels. In my opinion, children's behaviour is most influenced by peer groups and parent's behaviour because for most of the children, their parents are their role models.
Primarily, I think that public sphere of a person mirrors his/her private sphere. In simple words, I mean to say that what a person experiences in private life is reflected in his public behaviour. A man with social etiquettes, good articulation teaches his children to behave in the same way. Ultimately, the child also learns this behaviour and behaves in a good way. All of us must have learned a simple proverb in our childhood, "Children are like a pottery clay". That means, they are innocent, they take the shape what is given to them by their surroundings.
In addition to this, I would like to say that parents are the first teachers of the children. A child utters his first words in front of his parents. If he listens abusive language by his parents, he will definitely use the same.According to facts, basic etiquettes and manners are developed within a child at an early age of 5. At this age, any child is not as exposed to media as to his children. And when that child goes to school, spends time with his friends, inculcates the peer's behaviour. So, we can say that children's behaviour is not dependent on increasing violence in media. Rather, it is dependent on the environment in which he is exposed.
Furthermore, in order to support my position, I would like to provide an example in this context. A rich businessman's son; who has never seen the dearth of money will never understand the importance of money. On the other hand, a mendicant's son who has always seen his father begging to get a living will understand the importance of every penny. So, we can conclude that the most important guiding factor in a person's behaviour is the parent's behaviour.
On contrary to this, I would mention that increasing violence in media is affecting the children's behaviour somehow. Children while watching news regarding bomb blasts, kidnapping, murder etc over television might end up inferring that this scenario is commonplace and we should also inculcate it in our habit. This is obviously not good for children.
Last but not the least, I would like to conclude that children's behaviour is affected by the environment in which they are growing. So, in order to provide better future to the children and also to the society, we must ensure that children are always given good atmosphere where they can learn good habits and ultimately provide something good to the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, while, as to, i mean, i think, in addition, in my opinion, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2265.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 465.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87096774194 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75896964753 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479569892473 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.300697454 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222111309354 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671087241377 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780449855324 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122478743265 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568248451558 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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