Some people believe it is often necessary, even desirable for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Others believe that public has a right to be fully informed.
Indisputably, eyes of the public put pressure on political leaders to avoid unethical actions with their power. However, it is also important for people to have trust for their government for a nation to function well. Thus, I generally agree with the opinion that it is desirable for political leaders to withhold certain information to keep their people to trust the government.
Admittedly, people should have an access to investigate what their political leaders do. Consider the Watergate Scandal as an example. When President Nixon faced allegations that he had been associated with eavesdropping, he strongly refused all the allegations. However, people raised suspicion on him and eventually Nixon resigned from presidency. This example illustrates how disclosing what activities political leaders do helped restoring the freedom of people. However, not all cases of disclosing political activities are beneficial to people.
While surveillancing the government makes sure its officials avoid unethical activities, it may also harmful effects on the people. In today’s Western democratic societies, being involved with political issues is quarrelsome and stressful. As much as scandals of political leaders we encounter on news, we tend to lose interest in discussing political issues and avoid any possible hatred from others with different opinions. Such indifference decreases public participation in local government. This phenomenon has a detrimental effect of centralizing the administration. When we centralize administration from California to New Jersey, we lose rights to protect our customs. For instance, if the centralized government proposes a new policy to prevent street fairs, some regions may welcome it. On the other hand, some cities, like Oakland, with rich history with street fairs, would suffer from losing its local culture.
Disclosing too much flaws of political leaders does not only lead to indifference to political issues but also a chaos in emergency. Take the 2014-2016 Ebola outbreak in Liberia as an example. When the Ebola outbreak began in West Africa, Liberia lost more than 4,000 people due to Ebola while Mali, a neighboring country, lost only 6 people. One of the confounding factors that had contributed to the catastrophe that Liberia had was due to mistrust of the government. When the president of Liberia made an announcement to call government officials to immediately return to Liberia, many refused to return because they did not trust that their government can protect them from Ebola. On the other hand, the citizens did not follow hygiene recommendations that the government urged due to mistrust. Though it is important for Liberians to know what their political leaders do, they lost trust to cooperate and follow directions to survive through the epidemic. As this example illustrates, exposing too much political activities to the public may cause a deep mistrust of the government and hinders efficient response of the government for its people.
In conclusion, although disclosure of political activities are essential to keep politicians not to abuse their power, we must be aware that it has detrimental effects on the other side. It may lead to the indifference and mistrust of people to their government.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 32, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...ment. Admittedly, people should have an access to investigate what their political lea...
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Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to restore' or 'restore'.
Suggestion: to restore; restore
... activities political leaders do helped restoring the freedom of people. However, not all...
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Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ng its local culture. Disclosing too much flaws of political leaders does not onl...
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Line 7, column 432, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ted to the catastrophe that Liberia had was due to mistrust of the government. When...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2785.0 2235.4752809 125% => OK
No of words: 507.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49309664694 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05569601016 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489151873767 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 869.4 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.747033605 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.148148148 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.62962962963 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21802255882 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580956231768 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476892884803 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128083456319 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544300562918 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.