Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
College students are often torn between what is means to truly invest in themselves and what is a more tangibly secure financial road. Along with a bad economy, it is often difficult to pursue the study that one is passionate about because the study may not have a promising outlook for finding a job. However, I believe that students must consider their own talents and interest when choosing a field of study if the students have adequately explored their interests and talent and
Admittedly, many students can benefit from choosing a major that eases the job finding process. We cannot deny the fact that there are certain majors with better job outlook and salary than others. In my college, for instance, most freshmen wish to major in computer science because growing technology industry still hires a lot of students who major in computer science. When I talk to some of the students who pursue studying in computer science, I am often surprised how some used to have other interests and talents in other fields, such as music and literary arts. Some of them switched their majors from non-science studies to computer science because they were anxious of not getting jobs as they approach graduation. As a result, some of them successfully find jobs in the field that they frankly were not passionate about or talented at. Yet, we cannot overlook the fact that there are many students who do not know what they are interested in or talented at. They often choose the majors that can guarantee jobs relatively better than other majors and somehow become satisfied due to financial security.
However, in terms of quality of life, many may regret their choice of majoring in the field that they had no interest or talent at. With growing competitions in such popular fields, such as computer science and business, exceptional talents and performance levels are required to survive and grow in the industry. With mediocre or average talents, it is sometimes difficult to even maintain the position. Second, low interest level in the field of study cannot constantly motivate people to spontaneously develop and learn the subject. Instead, financial security becomes the only source that forces one to continue working. In this case, one’s quality of life drops significantly as he or she is committed to work in the field just to survive, not to enrich and develop oneself. Thus, the optimal solution for the students would be to explore their interests and talents as much as they can and consider multiple fields of studies that may suit them well. Furthermore, they must take an extra step to research about relevant jobs to the fields that they chose. As an example, there is the case of my sister. She had talents in drawing and enjoyed it very much to the point that she knows drawing is what she wants to do in the future. Though there is not many job positions for art majors, she had researched some positions that suit her interests and are financially secure to pursue. Currently, she works as a web designer at Pixar. After thorough research about her interests and job market, she successfully managed to handle multiple desires: to do what she enjoys and to achieve financial security.
In sum, choosing a field of study that one has a talent or interest still has more perks than a field of study that promises job security if one understands his or her passion and researches about its relevant job market.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... explored their interests and talent and Admittedly, many students can benefit fr...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...jor in computer science. When I talk to some of the students who pursue studying in compute...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
... However, in terms of quality of life, many may regret their choice of majoring in the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
frankly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, thus, well, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2861.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 585.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8905982906 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53962101926 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446153846154 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 896.4 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9471233241 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.208333333 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.375 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335070174858 0.243740707755 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901227115215 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096113379155 0.0758088955206 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233297918288 0.150359130593 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676949315375 0.0667264976115 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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