Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The advent of the internet is considered as one of the greatest thing to ever happen to mankind. However, it has also made the human brain redundant and has changed the way we interact with one another. In one instance, technology has broken boundaries and invisible walls making the world smaller. On the other hand, it has changed the meaning of human intimacy and made it superficial.
There is no denying the fact that one of the greatest thing to happen to mankind is the invention of the mobile phone/internet. Such was its greatness that the world seemed smaller. There was no longer the need to travel miles to see loved ones as you could easily make a voice or video call. Business meetings took a new dimension such that deals could be done from the comfort of your kitchen. Everything was done in real time and it made the world an easier place to live in. From this angle, i cannot help but agree that technology has indeed changed communication standards.
Notwithstanding, this is not necessarily a good thing. Maybe because of the fact that i am a romantic. The advent of the internet brought about the death of basic human intimacy. What happened to the days when a man wooed a woman with love letters? The days of love poems. These gave men the opportunity to really express themselves.Nowadays, no one really care for words or letters. The world is moving at a fast pace and depression rates are getting higher. You do not need to travel to physically see how your loved ones are doing. The only real connection is through instagram or twitter which has created some form of artificiality.
In as much as i miss the good old days and romance movies, i cannot help but agree that indeed technology has changed human interaction in so many ways. For example, a student studying far away from home may not feel homesick since he/she can easily make a skype call to his/her relatives. Work has become more flexible and gives parents more time to spend with their kids. For those who cant spend time with their kids, real time monitoring has given them the opportunity to be closer to them. Friendships are no longer limited to place of residence as you can make friends all over the world. Some people even find love online.Despite all these advantages, technology has given way to a lot of scams. Desperate women fall victims of scammers who use technology to mask their evil deeds.
In conclusion, technology has been both a curse and blessing depending on the way it is been viewed. So many boundaries have been broken, the result being a smaller world. On the other hand, it has been used to perpetuate evil by fraudstars.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...cation standards. Notwithstanding, this is not necessarily a good thing. Maybe b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2182.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 467.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67237687366 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66980192204 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524625267666 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0599369964 60.3974514979 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.2413793103 118.986275619 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1034482759 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96551724138 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193750747516 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428572856293 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393936879913 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10255488523 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455744563424 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 14.1392134831 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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