Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented
In the age of the ever-increasing use of technology, people often become immersed and become lost in that tiny screen we call our phones. However, this tiny tech is able to give you access to almost anything in the world. You can use tech, such as video chating, to connect with our other branches in your company that are based in the US to the ones located all the way across the ocean in Britain or allow you talk to your mom down the street in less than a couple of seconds.
Technology proves newer and better ways to increase our communication and the ability for us to connect on a whole new level. Financial advisors can handle your assets that are all over the world at a moment's notice. You can send money to your mom who may be in India from the US. We are able to set up huge video gaming events that connect people from all over the world. These are only a few ways on how technology connects us in ways we would have never thought of in a thousand years. Our ability to communicate with each other has been revolutionized by the ever evolving tech such as phones, video chat software, and cell phones. During the covid pandemic, it revolutionized the way business worked and the way school taught. All students were sent home and were made to learn from home and parents made to work from home. The use of technology allowed us to remain connected and develop new ways of staying close to family and friends even though we could not be physically in each other's presence.
On the other hand our phones and computers can also disconnect us in a way too. We get lost on these social media platforms such as ticktok and instagram, we don't even realize someone is speaking directly to us. We could lose the ability to physically connect on an in person basis and decrease our understanding of social interaction. We see kids on their phones immersed to the point where they lose interest and do not want to go outside and play with friends or family because they are lost in whatever social media platform they are on.
Even though technology can have its downfalls, I believe that technology has brought more good than bad. Technology allows us to remain connected to each other no matter what it is for. It could be for business ventures, academics , and even social interactions. The advancement of technology allows our entire world to communicate and connect all at once and allows us to continue to grow our social relationships anywhere without skipping a beat.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 990, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...ough we could not be physically in each others presence. On the other hand our pho...
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Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...forms such as ticktok and instagram, we dont even realize someone is speaking direct...
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Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r understanding of social interaction. We see kids on their phones immersed to th...
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Line 7, column 231, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ould be for business ventures, academics , and even social interactions. The advan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, may, second, so, even so, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58071748879 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53170715363 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497757847534 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5299907274 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.15 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317523622482 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959503057634 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0805734192714 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189452658573 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629578616162 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.