The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Quiot Manufacturing and Panoply Industries are close to one another, but the Panoply company has one hour shorter shifts and a 30 percent lower accident rate over the past year. Quiot claims that if they decrease their shifts by one hour as well they are sure to decrease the amount of on the job accidents versus the past year's accident rate. Quiot stands by the experts claim that the reason for the on the job accidents are due to lack of sleep and fatigue. Can fatigue be the only reason on which they had an increase of on the job accidents last year? What if it is the quality of training given to their workers rather than the amount of sleep that workers obtain outside of work. the amount of sleep an individual gets is not an aspect a company can control. They have to put other factors in place in order to decrease the amount of on the job accidents that occur and not stand by the assumption that fatigue and lack of sleep are the only cause of the accidents. In regards to their claim to the increase of productivity with the shortened shifts and decrease in on the job accidents can be slightly warranted because with the decrease of accidents less time on fixing those and more time the workers can continue their jobs. The decrease in shift times may not accomplish the goal the company is trying to achieve. This could be due to the allotted time for work and the time requirement needed to complete the required task for the job. The Quiot company and Panoply could be manufacturing two different products that require two sets of time requirements and completion steps. Depending on what each company makes the safety hazards for each company could be weighed differently versus the other company. The Quiot company could be producing items that are more hazardous to the employees versus Panoply's items. That could be the reason for the increase of on the job accidents compared from the past year. The sole reason that the company Quiot puts their company's higher rate of on the job accidents is due to lack of sleep and fatigue shows to be unwarranted due to other apparent potential cause to the that higher rate of accident at Quiot.
Comments
e-rater score report
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Minimum four paragraphs wanted
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1760 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.56 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.362 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.105 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.286 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.408 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.408 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 324, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'years'' or 'year's'?
Suggestion: years'; year's
...of on the job accidents versus the past years accident rate. Quiot stands by the expe...
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Line 2, column 345, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ts versus the past years accident rate. Quiot stands by the experts claim that the re...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 688, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ep that workers obtain outside of work. the amount of sleep an individual gets is n...
^^^
Line 2, column 974, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: Regarding; With regard to
...ep are the only cause of the accidents. In regards to their claim to the increase of producti...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y warranted because with the decrease of accidents less time on fixing those and ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59844559585 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37492431679 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.406735751295 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0863507119 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.333333333 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7333333333 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.46666666667 5.70786347227 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255400738731 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992169577118 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953310139075 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255400738731 0.128457276422 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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