Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Education is crucial to our life; it enlightens our path, broadens our horizon of understanding. Education has become indispensable part of our lives. However, education has also made our life irksome; people seem stressed during acquiring education and after its completion as well. Despite there are bunch of people who believe education is to free the mind and the spirit, I completely agree with other group of people believing education tends to restrain our mind and spirits.
Our system of education necessitates the children to acquire year-long formal education. Not only will the children need to get admitted to school right from the early childhood, but they will also compelled to take participate in competition. The way of education has been like more of a sprint; more you mug up, better your scores are going to be. This very stupid sense of competition has always put unbearable pressure in our child’s mind. This has not barred their minds from thinking out-of-box.
Furthermore, after getting formal education, we take up a job. After this, our life becomes so mundane that we always get to do same things. Our mind is always occupied by the burdens of duties and responsibilities. For example, after getting 16 years of education, a man joins a company. Having this 16 years of stressful life, he is again going to handle the same burdensome whole-life. He never gets free time on his own.
Many people might argue that education leads us to the path of enlightment; it illuminates the meaning of life to us. Wise person (like Baba Ramdev, Sadhguru) who is currently pursuing a very happy and peaceful life which would not have been achieved, if they had not obtained formal education. But weighing pros and cons of our current system of formal education, it has been found this education system has compelled us to have narrow outlook and incarcerated in a confined areas, where only stress and burden prevalents.
In conclusion, of course, education is something that is undeniable; however, it has fettered our mind from imaginative deliberation. Formal education tends to stop us from out-of-box thoughts. If the current system of imparting education is changed, it could be made a tool to set free the mind and spirit.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'bunches'?
Suggestion: bunches
...s completion as well. Despite there are bunch of people who believe education is to f...
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Line 3, column 199, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'compel'
Suggestion: compel
...the early childhood, but they will also compelled to take participate in competition. The...
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Line 7, column 475, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'area'?
Suggestion: area
... outlook and incarcerated in a confined areas, where only stress and burden prevalent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, well, for example, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 374.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04010695187 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84820987029 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550802139037 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.6104884962 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7619047619 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8095238095 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359671561048 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108591620401 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123575011651 0.0758088955206 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211508689067 0.150359130593 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151286847185 0.0667264976115 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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