Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Education is a tool to that helps carve an individual’s thoughts and actions. The given prompt tells us about the two different types of notions about that exist about education. One group of people consider education’s role as the liberation of the mind and spirit while the other group thinks that formal education is rather contributing to their restrainment. I strongly believe in the former.
Education today, helps define a person and their skills. It acts as a buffer for a person abilities and talent. Without education finding success is extremely difficult in this competitive world scenario. For instance, an uneducated person although possessing the intelligence and wisdom to succeed, will fail to do so without pursuing formal education. This feeling of not getting something even when having the required talent and knowledge can be soul-crushing. A situation like this does exactly the opposite of freeing one’s mind and spirit. It instead demolishes their hopes and spirit due to their continuous failure in a world which requires basic literacy to work. This example illustrates that even though some people may have the required know-how for jobs they will have an extremely tough time finding opportunities in today’s world, thus completely upsetting their mental peace.
Secondly, education helps one structure their own thoughts and action in a much more cohesive manner. Throughout, history it has been observed that people finding the path to enlightenment and searching for the true meaning of life, are always hungry to find out the various answers and get educated. Buddha, formerly King Siddhartha left all his kingly pleasures and desires to become a monk. He began his quest for the inner peace and satisfaction by consuming every piece of knowledge from any spiritual teacher who would entertain him. His success and teachings show us that proper education and understanding of the various complexities of life definitely helps us reach one step closer to liberation of our minds and spirits
Although some may argue that their exist many real world outliers that have proved that education is not a necessity for peace of mind and spirit, the fact that these people are so statistically rare only prove the thesis even more. Education helps a person deal with various circumstances throughout their life. Coupled with hard work and determination it helps them succeed and attain mental peace and satisfaction of mind. It helps give meaning to their actions and thoughts and better understand the true meaning of life.
- Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely align 81
- The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper Throughout the country last year as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth league sports over 40 000 of these young players suffered injuries Whe 60
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2157.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 410.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26097560976 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78453385549 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570731707317 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.1034896981 60.3974514979 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.85 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05 5.21951772744 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209730205665 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593765003773 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661836371927 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132330896256 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405583713772 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.