Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely align

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Some people believe that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. Others believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

At odds are two varying viewpoints on whether the purpose of education is to free the mind and spirit, or that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits. Both of these views seem to come at a time where education is arguably being used as a social leveller in meritocratic societies across the world, and in which the role of education is pivotal in the development of future generations. Whether or not the view that the purpose of education becomes counterproductive in formal education remains to be known.

In its inchoate stages education can be said to widely fill the gaps in knowledge and technical skills acutely needed in the industrial workforce. The modern definition of education, especially formal education and oftentimes public education, comes with the image of a classroom in which students are taught and tested towards skills deemed necessary for their development. These include soft and hard skills such as verbal and written communication, as well as programming skills and other twenty-first century skills often quoted in an institution’s official curriculum.

Beyond cerebral pursuits, these skills allow students, as recipients of education, to expand their knowledge unsupervised. Regardless of the success of these educational institutions in “freeing the mind and spirit”, it can be inferred that modern education has evolved beyond the needs of the working world and towards leisure and academia. For example, free online websites such as Khan Academy and even Google make it possible for students to educate themselves on matters from religion to politics to science, uplifting themselves with knowledge and perspective.

Formal education, on the other hand, may have a reputation for dulling creativity and individuality among other criticisms. For example, most countries have a “Social Studies” equivalent in their public or private school classrooms that aims to, in varying degrees, forge a sense of unity and patriotism in the youth of the country. Selective accounts of history are also known to have been taught depending on country. In severe cases, these teachings may be deemed dogmatic and restrict one’s view on the affairs relating to or of the country. Should the educational system make it difficult or uncommon for students to question their curriculum beyond what is taught, in cases where partial truths are being taught, it may be true that formal education restrains our minds. Where these teachings are littered with prejudice or bias, all the more that formal education tends towards desensitising students from empathy and hence their spirits.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 405, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the development of future generations. Whether or not the view that the purpose of edu...
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Line 1, column 405, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
... the development of future generations. Whether or not the view that the purpose of education ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, so, well, for example, such as, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2224.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 412.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39805825243 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94361342987 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519417475728 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6476675243 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.266666667 118.986275619 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4666666667 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245607920998 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897204908917 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.099087528927 0.0758088955206 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162910525827 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103821469605 0.0667264976115 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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