Some people believe that society should try to save every plant and animal species, despite the expense to humans in effort, time, financial well-beings. Others believe that society needs not make extraordinary effort, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species.
There are some people arguing that society is responsible for protecting all species among both animals and plants, even if, it is so expensive and demanding. Others, however believe that society does not have to be imposed too much cost and effort to save the species. In my opinion, preserving the biodiversity is both crucial and fruitful in terms of health and environment, especially saving the endangered ones is absolutely necessary.
The first reason is that sustainability in biodiversity lead to health of individuals and society. It is clear that our life strongly depends on the environment. Extinction of each species can impose an unexpected change in other species' lives and consequently I may harshly change the ecosystem. For example, two years ago, the authorities of the city in which I am living tended to use a new pesticide in the city's green spaces. The pesticide was effective to protect the trees and plants but it has a side effect that was unknown by the company produced it. The pesticide caused a negative effect on the environment. Unfortunately, it killed the useful insects eating the very tiny harmful other insects. After about one month the number of harmful insects increased rapidly. They become new hostile of human in city, numerous number of people who had breathing disorders had to stay at home. Lots of people who were suffered from allergic and Asthma had to go to hospital or take heavy medicine, Hence, the careless use of the pesticide in the nature brought lot of demerits to city dwellers.
Secondly, there are lots of species which are going to being extinct. Some of them are rarely found in other areas. Some of them are also significantly useful in industry such as pharmaceutical plants using in medical industry. If we ignore to save them, it would be highly possible that we would omit them in our future life. Therefore, the merits of using them would disappear consequently. In addition, some animals like Persian tiger is going to disappearing. If society do not attempt to care them, the people who are keen on this rare perfect tiger may have to read about it merely in books and newspapers in future.
Addmitedly, as I mentioned in Introductory paragraph, there are some people who believe that protecting the scarce species is not vital because it imposes a large amount of expenditures and efforts to individuals and society. However, as we are highly depended on our living context, the money, time and efforts spending in saving the environment surrounded us is neither unwise nor unimportant. In conclusion, under no circumstances are we allowed to ignore preserving the nature and the species.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 420, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessary'.
Suggestion: necessary
...specially saving the endangered ones is absolutely necessary. The first reason is that sustainabil...
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Line 3, column 709, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ng the very tiny harmful other insects. After about one month the number of harmful i...
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Line 5, column 613, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...about it merely in books and newspapers in future. Addmitedly, as I mentioned in Intro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2229.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 445.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00898876404 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84535027361 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54606741573 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.11940349 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9130434783 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.347826087 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91304347826 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200603444878 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476964318741 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590905029752 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13244950316 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772232161122 0.0667264976115 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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