Some people believe that success in creative fields, such as painting, fiction writing, and
filmmaking, primarily requires hard work and perseverance. Others believe that such
success mainly requires innate talents that cannot be learned.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own
position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Many successful figures in creative fields start their career at very young age. This may be due to the fact that most talented individuals show their talent from their infant years. However, it may be that only those who start developing their talent through practice and learning from very young age, thus having more time to become more adept, are the ones who become successful in the future. While having innate talent is important to become successful, it is no more important in creative fields than it is in other academic or practical fields. Only by hard work and perseverance to continuously develop and sharpen an existing talent one can obtain abilities to show that talent to other people and become acknowledged for his talent, thus being a prominent figure in the field.
It is understandable some may think that innate talent is the main factor in determining who will be successful in creative fields. It is true that even the lessons from the most famous teachers can't teach the ability to create an original masterpiece. Unlike academic fields where learning existing theories is the most important work that has to be done before even thinking of being creative and coming up with an original theory, it is possible for one to take a shortcut. For instance, a seven-year-old who never had drawing lessons can draw a picture and it may be acknowledged by many people as beautiful, leading to the picture being evaluated at thousands of dollars.
However, success can't be achieved unless others acknowledge the value of one's work. Learning and practicing can provide means to show the existing talent in a way that people can understand. For example, f J.K.Rowling couldn't use enough vocabulary and write elaborate sentences that can deliver the complicated world of wizards to the readers, it is hard to envision her success. While her creativity may have been something that she is born with, her writing skills must have come from practice and hard work.
Moreover, the ability to persevere through the process of learning and creating work until it can be acknowledged is important as well. Especially in creative fields, it is very rare to expect that someone new to the field will achieve immediate success just because his work is outs
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Suggestion: one's
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Suggestion: Rowling
...ople can understand. For example, f J.K.Rowling couldnt use enough vocabulary and write...
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... understand. For example, f J.K.Rowling couldnt use enough vocabulary and write elabora...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in fact, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 380.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98684210526 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66943689789 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497368421053 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8764428602 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.333333333 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 5.21951772744 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198376250185 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079653107391 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534168356874 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127600479774 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186221607913 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.