Some people believe that teaching morality should be the foundation of education. Others believe that teaching a foundation of logical reasoning would do more to produce a moral society.
Morality can evolve according to the development of the society, so morality is more like a collection of moral standards that address the issues that matter the most to the public, instead of a still principle that will not alter. For example, having love affair under a marriage is immoral in previous society and can even cause death due to it against the law. However, it is not a crime at all in most of the modern societies, and bear much less negative chastise comparing to other periods of human history. This change illustrates that the essence of the morality will evolve based on the social needs and trends. Therefore, I would support that it is more critical to teach the logical reasoning in order to produce a moral society since there is no unchangeable morality. It is more important to equip people with the ability to judge instead of following the morality without any question, which I would explain further.
First, one objective of the education is to enable people with the awareness and the judgement of morality in order to raise the moral standard in the society. Based on this assumption, it is easy to claim that by teaching morality directly, people will have the sense of the morality and lead to more moral behaviors. However, this technique can only increase people's awareness of morality, but not to ensure a moral behavior since people don't have the ability to judge and don't make themselves accountable when there is a moral choice needed to be made. For instance, for governors' who commit bribe, the problem is not they don't know that bribe is immoral.It's always that even though they know it's immoral, they still can't resist the attraction of the corresponded monetary or powerful rewards. It demonstrates that due to the lack of the judgement of the conditions, lead them unaccountable of the behaviors. The point that I would like to emphasize here is that the essential way to produce a moral society is that people are not only aware of the morality, but also possess the judgement and hold themselves accountable, so the moral behaviors can really be cultivated, which is difficult to be obtained if only morality and no logical reasoning is taught.
Second, people may argue some basic moralities is still important to be taught, such as not to lie or not to kill people. I agree with the statement that some universal moralities are vital to be taught systematically through the education. However, I would also argue that are some contextual moralities may even more important in modern society since not everything is only right and wrong and enable people with the capability to distinguish the grey area and make suitable behaviors are critical. For instance, lying is immoral, but if the white lie can light up a desperate person's life, should we lie or not? These kind of questions can be acted morally, only when people are taught logical reasoning.
In conclusion, the action of morality is vital in achieving a moral society, and that's why I support the second statement, which can lead to an actionable moral outcome more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2561.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86882129278 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68091643997 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456273764259 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 838.8 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.5983146802 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.277777778 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2222222222 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344916812725 0.243740707755 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117317013353 0.0831039109588 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857380131843 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216148783747 0.150359130593 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507895564787 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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