Some people claim that you can tell whether a nation is great by looking at the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Others argue that the surest indicator of a great nation is, in fact, the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The prompt urges the notion that the greatness of a nation can be identified by the acheivements of its rulers, artists and scientists, contrarily - it is in fact can only be identified by the welfare of all its people. For some obvious reasons I would like to be "mostly disagree with the second notion of the prompt" with the given concept and hereby obliged to provide necessary elaboration of certain points in defense of my position.
The greatness of a nation is not subjected to only one thing, rather it is a perimeter that is dependent upon many things. However, the ultimate aim of the greatness is only the developement, welfare and safety of the people circumscribed by the boundary of the nation. Everything and anything that is done in order to achieve the greatness is only for the people. Saying this, the rulers, artists and scientists - are the prominent figures of a nation and are laudable for their contribution to their nation. The interesting thing is that - no figure can gain the fame or the applaude from its fellow people unless it has done something great for his or her country. It might be by inventiong something or by ruling the country towards economical and social developement or even by enthrawlling artistic panache. Wahtever is gained by these prominent firgures are subjected to the developemtn of their nation. It is because without any physical, social, economical significance - no deftness or greatness or skill of a person can be regarded as great virtue. For example - if an indiovidual ruled a nation for 30 or 40 odd years and has been successful in achieving political and economical flourishment from the earlier stage - then the nation obviously is going to be remembered by his fellow people as one of the greatests that ever ruled. On the other hand, if another ruler of same potential and elegance could not achieve the feat has been achieved by by the former mentioned one - his talents and his charisma are of no use because these have not served to anything for his layperson. So, the ultimate greatness of an individual is identified by the welfare done by him.
If a person is determined great by only his potential then probably there will be so much greats in the world to be uncountable! But surprisingly that is not the case. It is because there are so many people with great potential but have not been able to do anything to be regarded as great. For exmaple - the people of their respective countries are always willing to do good things for their countries, live and die with honour - that is almost same for all the human beings of respective countries. Among them there wll be some people who have shown spectacular promise in their lives to do something very big and unimaginable for their countries. But could not gain the feat becasue of many factors. Nevertheless, among those people there will be only a few people who has been able to achieved that feat and contribute greatly for his nation adn others just could not reach upto that level. So, these later people will be regarded as greats, not the former groups - because of their accomplishments for the bigger purpose - benefits for humanity.
However, it might be said that - there are many more prodigious inventions that had been phenominal and even in some cases can surpass the potential of great inventions that had been regarded as boons. But the question is what were the purpose of those inventions? Like - did those inventions come as benefits for the simple peeple or the inventions had been diverted to the actual purpose of those? For example - it is the fact that all the inventions will not be regarded as beneficiary for human beings. Some of those will be very popitious and some of those might not withstand the purpose. In these cases - although the both of thes two types of inventions had been produced by the scholars, scientists and other prodigious figures we can only count the inventions as greatests which have been the casue of human peace, harmony and welfare. The other inventions will be regarded as "very good' ones or with so much applaudatory words but will never be tantamount to the greatness of the beneficiary ones - becasue of its purpose and use that defied these inventions from other ones.
So, looking at all the points and examples mentioned above, it can be said that - the greatness of a nation is achieved by the welfare of its people because the achievements of all of its rulers, scientists and artists will all be valued as zero if those achievements are not conduicive to the welfare of its people.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1457, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: by
... not achieve the feat has been achieved by by the former mentioned one - his talents ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...otential then probably there will be so much greats in the world to be uncountable! ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, so, then, for example, in fact, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 56.0 19.5258426966 287% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 14.8657303371 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 58.6224719101 159% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3799.0 2235.4752809 170% => OK
No of words: 788.0 442.535393258 178% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82106598985 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.29823911269 4.55969084622 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75709129505 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.374365482234 0.4932671777 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1201.5 704.065955056 171% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.4549870674 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.678571429 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1428571429 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92857142857 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288423766331 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932653355787 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860161555447 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213816396089 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11025274895 0.0667264976115 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1457, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: by
... not achieve the feat has been achieved by by the former mentioned one - his talents ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 86, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...otential then probably there will be so much greats in the world to be uncountable! ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, so, then, for example, in fact, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 56.0 19.5258426966 287% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 14.8657303371 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 58.6224719101 159% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3799.0 2235.4752809 170% => OK
No of words: 788.0 442.535393258 178% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82106598985 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.29823911269 4.55969084622 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75709129505 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.374365482234 0.4932671777 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1201.5 704.065955056 171% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.4549870674 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.678571429 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1428571429 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92857142857 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288423766331 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932653355787 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860161555447 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213816396089 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11025274895 0.0667264976115 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.