Some people claim that you can tell whether a nation is great by looking at the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Others argue that the surest indicator of a great nation is, in fact, the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
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An old quote says that people deserve what government they choose. In fact, there are many components to judge a nation from. The prompt recommends that a nation is great if it has many achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientist, but the others claim that the general welfare of its people is what shows much about it. In my opinion, a stand for the good and wellbeing of people as a main indicator of the greatness of a nation, and argue that art, science and ruling are not as important as the first ones for several reasons.
Firstly, members of a nation are the most important subjects of a government. Thus their wellbeing is basic and is shown and measured in many ways. For example, statistics, surveys show that Finland is a great nation and people there are very happy. Consequently, the first idea that comes in mind is the way they live and the quality life they live. It is very impressive how people spend their free time, how healthy and happy they are and the right they have toward the job they do. However, the credit for this welfare might be dedicated to some rulers, artists or scientists but this is not the point. They might play a role or be a component among many others that bring the prosperity of a nation.
Secondly, even if we assume that a nation needs some great people to call it a great nation, one should still be seeing the wellbeing, because this brings happiness in peoples’ lives. For example, a person that has a good health and income tends to live a happy life. Research has shown that happy people reflect it and affect other people’s mood and happiness. In other words happiness is “contagious”. Thus, one should look how economy and technology has changed our life due to humongous inventions. The perfect point is when we see these good things used by people for their own good.
Of course some argue that in our world greatness of a nation can be viewed by evaluating how wealthy people are, and the others think that great people bring the greatness of a nation. However, being wealthy is decisive for people to live a normal and happy life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 78, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ost important subjects of a government. Thus their wellbeing is basic and is shown a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, for example, in fact, of course, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 377.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59416445623 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45286820246 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488063660477 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.1393982311 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1578947368 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.26315789474 5.21951772744 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367668010945 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109491209573 0.0831039109588 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113418227373 0.0758088955206 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254668909148 0.150359130593 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0964561900565 0.0667264976115 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.