Some people claim that you can tell whether a nation is great by looking at the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Others argue that the surest indicator of a great nation is, in fact, the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
how should we define a great nation, by its people’">people’s general welfare, or instead by the achievements of its elites? To me, both factors are indispensable for a nation to be called “great”.
one the one hand, to identify a great nation, one certainly should not miss its people’">people’s welfare. There are countless cases in human history in which a nation’s outstanding individuals produce many remarkable achievements at the cost of people’">people’s livelihood. such a nation can hardly be counted as great, for it misses the original intention of humans to form political entities, namely, to protect the people. these totalitarian nations produce each monumental project to fulfill the personal ambitions and pleasures of the tyrant. one needs to look no further than the former Soviet Union to confirm this point. it made countless scientific achievements within the last century, but at the expense of its common people’">people’s livelihood. In the end, when many of its people were short of bread and milk, the country could no longer survive on satellites and semiconductors. Whatever achievement were made, they were not dedicated to making its people’">people’s life better. when we now look at this history, we think that its atrocities have overshadowed any of its greatness.
one the other hand, even though the general welfare of the people is a necessary indicator of a great nation, it is not a sufficient marker. In fact, when we look at the names of great nations in the entirety of human history, these names pop out: ancient Greece, the Roman Empire, China, great Britain and so on. when we think about them, we do not immediately reflect on the comfort of their people, but we remind ourselves of all the marks these countries have imprinted on the entirety of human civilization, such as democracy, the aqueduct, paper. the laws of motion, just to name a few. Apparently, these all have much to do with great individuals. In sharp contrast with these examples are the wealthy countries surrounding the Persian Gulf. Perhaps their citizen enjoy very happy lives given their financial status. However, these countries cannot leave their names in the hall of fame simply by exploiting nature oil resources.
All in all, the work of great individuals and the general welfare of people are not in tension as the prompt suggests. In a country where life is relatively easy, people have more opportunities to develop their own strengths, and the success of these individuals will, in turn, benefit the life of the general public. To sum up, only through scrutiny into both aspects can one reliable tell how great a nation really is.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, however, if, look, really, so, in fact, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2344.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 439.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33940774487 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.0073717492 2.79657885939 143% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535307517084 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8280337532 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.545454545 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9545454545 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40909090909 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303648769636 0.243740707755 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.096494475508 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751039735163 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197308949104 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0218247484044 0.0667264976115 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.