Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility
The issue here of whether sports star and movie star should fulfill the societal responsibility as they behave as role models for the younger generation is a contentious one. Though both sides have their strengths and weaknesses, I believe that sports stars and movie star should have a sense of obligation and should feel responsible for their actions.
The lifestyle of a famous movie star and sports star is very luxurious. They are paid millions of dollars for their work and are also pampered, as profusion of amenities are made available to them. The moment they get famous, the fame gets on their head and they start feeling above all. The plethora of young demotics look up to them and try to emulate their look, behaviour, lifestyle etc. But this is misleading as they are just wasting their time which they could have devoted to making their own career.
Furthermore lets consider this example, if a movie is superhit, even if the actor in it had done the role of a drunkard or had smoked cigerattes, the younger generation feels they should also do as their idol or role model has done that in the movie. They are so influenced by the demeanor of the movie stars that they are not able to distinguish between good and bad. They ignore the fact that the actor was doing acting in the film but in real life he might not be drinking or smoking. Thus the type of role movie stars play have a great impact on today's youth.
To add to it, if a sportsperson, say for example a cricketer has scored two consecutive centuries and also made the team win and became the man of the match, he becomes the youth icon. All young people who follow cricket to the T, start feeling that his batting style is the best style and they start to facsimile him. Also the sports stars who after wining the match, have celebrations and if some undecorous images of the cricketer are leaked in public, it leads to bad impact on the young people.
Having said all this, we can thus tell that whether it is a movie star or a sports star. once they become famous, they should be very careful of how they behave in the society, as it will have direct consequences on the people who idolate them. There are times when an actor has committed suicide and the news spreads nationwide, people who idolise the actor feel so disheartened that they also try to suicide. Such deleterious impact the actions of superstars can have on the population.
In conclusion, I would agree with the author that sports star and movie star should be officious to the society and before taking any major steps should also give it a thought of the results and the impact on the people who consider them as their role models.For these reasons, they should fulfill this societal responsibility.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'thus', 'for example', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235404896422 0.240241500013 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.175141242938 0.157235817809 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0621468926554 0.0880659088768 71% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0320150659134 0.0497285424764 64% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0790960451977 0.0444667217837 178% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.112994350282 0.12292977631 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0414312617702 0.0406280797675 102% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.43119339053 2.79330140395 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0225988700565 0.030933414821 73% => OK
Particles: 0.00188323917137 0.0016655270985 113% => OK
Determiners: 0.112994350282 0.0997080785238 113% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0263653483992 0.0249443105267 106% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0169491525424 0.0148568991511 114% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2759.0 2732.02544248 101% => OK
No of words: 492.0 452.878318584 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60772357724 6.0361032391 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.280487804878 0.366273622748 77% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.180894308943 0.280924506359 64% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.115853658537 0.200843997647 58% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0833333333333 0.132149295362 63% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43119339053 2.79330140395 87% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 219.290929204 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481707317073 0.48968727796 98% => OK
Word variations: 55.6432455666 55.4138127331 100% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.8947368421 23.380412469 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.053334501 59.4972553346 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.210526316 141.124799967 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8947368421 23.380412469 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.473684210526 0.674092028746 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.21349557522 134% => OK
Readability: 43.9841677364 51.4728631049 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.36184210526 1.64882698954 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.573958695483 0.391690518653 147% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.099760830092 0.123202303941 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0523224278951 0.077325440228 68% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.599030270093 0.547984918172 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.160883476782 0.149214159877 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.221732313849 0.161403998019 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863624795177 0.0892212321368 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.402713960614 0.385218514788 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0463887155669 0.0692045440612 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.364353559253 0.275328986314 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030212170053 0.0653680567796 46% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.4325221239 77% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.5995575221 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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